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2024-09-25 13:22

I will only write about the issues I have. Mc: He has a huge foot fetish so much so that it seems there is more mention of this than any other romance. He is also a huge simp for hermione and almost never says no to her even if he knows it will put her in danger. Story: There are a lot of plot holes like the guild was mentioned probably just to have an excuse for Mc to check out a few things in the world and never mentioned again. It makes no sense for a puppet with a fixed number of spells to be able to become a ruler especially since voldmort did not easily kill the puppet but Mc did despite admitting to being a lot weaker than voldmort. Lastly year 2 is a bit confusing and mc is impulsive so just bear with it it gets better.

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Ok let me be honest here, I have read lots of fanfics here on web novel from good to bad to just outright wish fulfilment fanfics with no regards to story. But this is another level. Honestly if you have anything else to read in our library read that instead of this. But in case you have nothing else to read and you are hardco*re HP fan below are the pros and cons of this novel. Pros: 1. No harem (Or con depending on reader) 2. Mc not op at start 3. No system penalty 4. Does makes you laugh at moments. Cons: 1. Story makes no sense what-so-ever, System reward is said to be something in one chapter but changed in next. Like literally multiple times. 2. Mc can not even reach 2nd year spell proficiency by himself without doing system advancement quest. Like seriously even if he learns everything he still can not use it. It makes the system more of a drag. I mean systems are suppose to help mc not restrict them even from learning most basic knowledge by themselves. 3. Mc just being a child deals with criminals, arm dealers etc. and no one questions it. 4. People like hermione just conveniently ignores the topics were mc's secrets are involved. 5. Racism and nationalism is obviously there with all the general racist and nationalist comments you can think of. 6. Talent points in system is just useless as author explains everything in term of skill points and giving analogy like 10 talent is 10 exp per hr. and 5 talent is 5 exp. That is not how talent works it's not 2+2=4 logic. 7. Even if mc gains training memory of a character the skills he receive is still 0/100 points at most basic level. How is that even possible it's like me getting a biologist's memory but still need to start from high school biology. 8. Wizards are shown very weak in this novel to the point that mc with a gun breaks quirrell's protego spell. Wizards here are shown more as an assa*sin where they can only win if they trick their opponent or stay hidden once they come face to face with muggles it's the end.

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