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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv12yr
2022-08-03 05:59

It is readable and may even have a story somewhere down the line, but I don't have the patience to wait for that. 16 chapters in and this story has gone nowhere. A more talented author could probably take everything written so far and condense it into a single chapter. Yes, this story is still on chapter 1 as far as I am concerned. The character interactions also remind me of interactions between medically retrded people.

Pi-Gar-Chu (One Piece Fanfic)

dancematdan
4.5
145 Chs

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dancematdan
dancematdanAuthor

I was going to leave a long reply but I deleted that.. The conversations and interactions may not be that well written because of my lack of social ability and writing so I admit my fault there if it is a problem for others but it could just you being too critical too. (I mean your words at the end) As for the condensing? I limit myself to 800-2000 words per chapter and have to fit in many things at the beginning for world building. Three to four chapters a week is already my limit since I have other priorities so if you lack the patience to see where this goes then you could just set it aside and come back later. (I mean.. even in the books description it tells you that this was just a spur of the moment project and is not my first priority)

2yr
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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

On fanfic (the wb-site), there is an author who writes like you X100 called ThirdFang. Crazy talented writer, amazing ideas and details, in fact I have never seen an author more talented in writing details. Now what do you think when I tell you that ALL his stories he has written so far have over 1 MILLION words? Pretty sure all 7 Harry Potter books put together have less words. Also his 1 million word stories are STILL ON GOING. He started writing his fate story on 2011 and it updated just recently with a new chapter. Try reading any of his stuff, it will 100% be fun for you, at least in the beginning. lol

dancematdan:I was going to leave a long reply but I deleted that.. The conversations and interactions may not be that well written because of my lack of social ability and writing so I admit my fault there if it is a problem for others but it could just you being too critical too. (I mean your words at the end) As for the condensing? I limit myself to 800-2000 words per chapter and have to fit in many things at the beginning for world building. Three to four chapters a week is already my limit since I have other priorities so if you lack the patience to see where this goes then you could just set it aside and come back later. (I mean.. even in the books description it tells you that this was just a spur of the moment project and is not my first priority)
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2yr
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dancematdan
dancematdanAuthor

I will try to have a look in the future if I have the free time, thanks. :)

InternetSaint:On fanfic (the wb-site), there is an author who writes like you X100 called ThirdFang. Crazy talented writer, amazing ideas and details, in fact I have never seen an author more talented in writing details. Now what do you think when I tell you that ALL his stories he has written so far have over 1 MILLION words? Pretty sure all 7 Harry Potter books put together have less words. Also his 1 million word stories are STILL ON GOING. He started writing his fate story on 2011 and it updated just recently with a new chapter. Try reading any of his stuff, it will 100% be fun for you, at least in the beginning. lol
2yr
TheMotherLand
TheMotherLandLv4

All Harry Potter books combined have over a million words.

InternetSaint:On fanfic (the wb-site), there is an author who writes like you X100 called ThirdFang. Crazy talented writer, amazing ideas and details, in fact I have never seen an author more talented in writing details. Now what do you think when I tell you that ALL his stories he has written so far have over 1 MILLION words? Pretty sure all 7 Harry Potter books put together have less words. Also his 1 million word stories are STILL ON GOING. He started writing his fate story on 2011 and it updated just recently with a new chapter. Try reading any of his stuff, it will 100% be fun for you, at least in the beginning. lol
2yr
1
SujetoXVII
SujetoXVIILv1

Uncle you seem to me a fanboy of the author and that has a million words. You do not know the life of a writer if he has time or not, your author may have a lot of free time to think about his story. In addition, you are from a rich or wealthy family and have a lot of free time or you are a teenager who does not know the life of an adult

InternetSaint:On fanfic (the wb-site), there is an author who writes like you X100 called ThirdFang. Crazy talented writer, amazing ideas and details, in fact I have never seen an author more talented in writing details. Now what do you think when I tell you that ALL his stories he has written so far have over 1 MILLION words? Pretty sure all 7 Harry Potter books put together have less words. Also his 1 million word stories are STILL ON GOING. He started writing his fate story on 2011 and it updated just recently with a new chapter. Try reading any of his stuff, it will 100% be fun for you, at least in the beginning. lol
1yr
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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Uncle you seem to not understand my words. I hate that author and his style. He is still crazy good at writing details though.

SujetoXVII:Uncle you seem to me a fanboy of the author and that has a million words. You do not know the life of a writer if he has time or not, your author may have a lot of free time to think about his story. In addition, you are from a rich or wealthy family and have a lot of free time or you are a teenager who does not know the life of an adult
1yr
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EpithetEnjoyer
EpithetEnjoyerLv1

This nephew needs to take a moment to think :C

InternetSaint:Uncle you seem to not understand my words. I hate that author and his style. He is still crazy good at writing details though.
1yr
Emmanuel_Capricorn
Emmanuel_CapricornLv4

don't worry iIthink it's good

dancematdan:I was going to leave a long reply but I deleted that.. The conversations and interactions may not be that well written because of my lack of social ability and writing so I admit my fault there if it is a problem for others but it could just you being too critical too. (I mean your words at the end) As for the condensing? I limit myself to 800-2000 words per chapter and have to fit in many things at the beginning for world building. Three to four chapters a week is already my limit since I have other priorities so if you lack the patience to see where this goes then you could just set it aside and come back later. (I mean.. even in the books description it tells you that this was just a spur of the moment project and is not my first priority)
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