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ThisNovelSucksBro
ThisNovelSucksBroLv32yr
2022-10-24 14:02

I could only get to chapter 9 but in all honesty if you're expecting somebody ruthless like the actual Brightburn you're in the wrong place. Main Problems: // OC's being introduced with one of them being a love interest. // Author doesn't understand the power levels of his own character so the character will be op one minute then get smoked the next (Bare in mind so far the MC hasn't lost once but he never wins either) // No killing certain characters (Loki should've died but author did the ol' plot to prevent it) And overall the story is just boring, he's not as passive as Superman but he's not even close to Brightburn/Homelander or even an anti-hero, just a corny edgy brat who's character development is done in a single chapter.

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mow
mowLv4

Thanks for the warning.

SS_Ozymander
SS_OzymanderLv2

disappointing, what's the point if hes not evil. that's bright burns entire character.

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Writing Quality 3/5: There were noticeable grammatical errors every so often that I would notice and the paragraphing does get too big most of the time but otherwise the writing quality is good. You are finding your voice and style of writing which is good. Stability of updates 5/5: Updates daily, consistent so far 👍 Story development 3/5: Up until the seventh/eight chapter it's followed the MCU canon (up till avengers) with the MC taking the places of characters in key moments. i.e. beating up Loki, bring the nuke up, fighting thor, etc. Though after the eight chapter the author has been deviating from canon to introduce the OC. If the story continues longer then story development would most likely be a four. Character design 3/5: The main character is the antagonist of superhero horror film Brightburn post movie I presume? (Haven't watched Brightburn). He's a man coming to terms with what he's done and lost and has chosen solitude in hopes for events to never repeat. He gets dragged into another mess years after the massacre where he comes into conflict with his biological instinct and his past. Overall pretty good with how the character progresses in the story. My only gripe is the fact that despite there being characters that could help him find closure with what he's done, a romantic female lead (OC) is introduced. The OC is a crazy battle maniac who is introduced as a blood thirsty person who has no qualms with killing. This OC is then set up to be MCs mentor and helper. Wonder how that's going to turn out, but good luck. World Background 5/5: Simply for the fact that despite there not being a lot of lore on Brightburn, the author has taken the effort to try and build it from the groundup which I can respect. Good on you. Another thing I have to address is don't be too mean to the author and his story or he'll get angry and start deleting your comments :P. Being a new author doesn't give you an imaginary shield to other peoples opinions/criticisms, no matter how stupid they sound.

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