Review Detail of Mohamed_Allam in Naruto: I Read It In A Book [COMPLETED]
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The story is full of holes and illogical. First, and one of the biggest holes is that Naruto did not use FTG effectively first in his fights, he only used it once in any fight that appeared, for example, against Orochimaru the first time he almost did not use it, although from my point of view and many consider that FTG if used effectively can certainly beat Orochimaru. Secondly, Naruto clearly sayed that he was worried about Itachi, his girlfriend and his family but didn't even think to tag them with FTG mark?? He could always go right in and save Izumi and even confirm his sister's position as an intelligent person he could at least do it but no he didn't. Then there is the whole accusation part. Yamanka can see the memory of a dead body even after its death but they can't check the Hokage's son's memory to confirm his claims?? And the torture part also with Minato as Hokage, the supreme leader in the village. Can't he sit a guard from the ANBU to his son under the excuse of guarding?? Wasn't he able to use this torture as an excuse to move him to another place?? There is a lot that this story misses and you could have made Naruto a villain in easier ways relying on that his reality based only on the books but you got yourself into a illogical drama in order to maximize the effect just sorry but you failed. As a final note, I'm not against Naruto as a villain, but this story went in the wrong direction
Naruto: I Read It In A Book [COMPLETED]
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You do not how actually FTG work. A marker or something is needed and Orochimaru already knows he can use it since he publicly used in the chunin battle. Meaning he can restrict or remove it. And you should think how even in the original it was the same, Minato only tagged enemies with it. Because no one is comfortable being tagged with it even during peace time. Man the rating of 1 star was still clearly illogical based on what you wrote. You should just honestly write that you don't like this type work so you rated it as such. Trying to put it in words and getting them wrong is bad for other readers who wanna try it.
I agree on a lot of what was said, and while I know it can be hard to get to where you want with perfect logic, it is too far of a stretch to completely disregard the Yamanaka clans mind reading ability. Another part is the part where... *spoiler* Itachi dies. We know he has MS, which includes tsukiyomi, so there is no reason Itachi couldn't 1. see if the Isumi was fake and 2. if she was real, Tsukiyomi Orochimaru to release her and completely destroy him while doing so as he did in the original while heavily sick... Also, the only reason why Naruto would be persecuted would be because Danzo is doing something behind the scenes, presumably with Kotoamatsukami, although nothing is mentioned about the state of Shisui. Even if people was Kotoamatsukami'ed, which is 1 person per eye every 1-10 years (conflicting sources - some say Danzo can use it more frequently because of Hashirama cells) so undoubtedly SOME hyuga would realize ALL the clan heads AND the hokage being mind-controlled, since Ao could figure out Mifune was manipulated in the original... The argument that Hyugas wouldn't check out their village leadership is also void, since there are Hyugas in ANBU whose role would logically be to check for any spies and would also see the leaders... The situation used to imprison Naruto is completely illogical, BUT, the fic is still enjoyable nonetheless, and there might be magic fanfic ways to justify all this, but it will need an explanation at some point.
In fact, I excluded the ms of Itachi and Shisui's death because the writer did not mention anything about them, although he indirectly said that Itachi got the MC in the Chunin exams, but unfortunately he did not mention that he used it, so I excluded it. As for Shisui, as you said, all the arguments and explanations That you gave is more than enough to discuss if Danzo had Kotomatsukami. I also agree with you that the story is interesting I was very excited about it at first but I was kind of shocked by the writer's choice so I lost my passion for the story
Kamikaze22601:I agree on a lot of what was said, and while I know it can be hard to get to where you want with perfect logic, it is too far of a stretch to completely disregard the Yamanaka clans mind reading ability. Another part is the part where... *spoiler* Itachi dies. We know he has MS, which includes tsukiyomi, so there is no reason Itachi couldn't 1. see if the Isumi was fake and 2. if she was real, Tsukiyomi Orochimaru to release her and completely destroy him while doing so as he did in the original while heavily sick... Also, the only reason why Naruto would be persecuted would be because Danzo is doing something behind the scenes, presumably with Kotoamatsukami, although nothing is mentioned about the state of Shisui. Even if people was Kotoamatsukami'ed, which is 1 person per eye every 1-10 years (conflicting sources - some say Danzo can use it more frequently because of Hashirama cells) so undoubtedly SOME hyuga would realize ALL the clan heads AND the hokage being mind-controlled, since Ao could figure out Mifune was manipulated in the original... The argument that Hyugas wouldn't check out their village leadership is also void, since there are Hyugas in ANBU whose role would logically be to check for any spies and would also see the leaders... The situation used to imprison Naruto is completely illogical, BUT, the fic is still enjoyable nonetheless, and there might be magic fanfic ways to justify all this, but it will need an explanation at some point.
Also Danzo was involved in all that stuff. Why are you asking about Yamanaka clan checking him when this whole thing may as well be plotted by others.
LordFish:You do not how actually FTG work. A marker or something is needed and Orochimaru already knows he can use it since he publicly used in the chunin battle. Meaning he can restrict or remove it. And you should think how even in the original it was the same, Minato only tagged enemies with it. Because no one is comfortable being tagged with it even during peace time. Man the rating of 1 star was still clearly illogical based on what you wrote. You should just honestly write that you don't like this type work so you rated it as such. Trying to put it in words and getting them wrong is bad for other readers who wanna try it.
There is something you may not have noticed throughout the story, but Obito with one of the most powerful forces of time and space and the legacy of Madara Uchiha and Black Zetsu wasn't unable to remove or resist the FTG tage even after he accompanied the Jubi Jinchuuriki he couldn't do that. And if you say that Minato was died and he don't care. Killer B since he got the tage in the Third Ninja War, he was not able with the help of Kumo(kumo is the best in research) and Hachibi to remove the mark and it remained until the fourth war, when Minato moved to it to transfer the Biju Dama of the Jubi.
LordFish:You do not how actually FTG work. A marker or something is needed and Orochimaru already knows he can use it since he publicly used in the chunin battle. Meaning he can restrict or remove it. And you should think how even in the original it was the same, Minato only tagged enemies with it. Because no one is comfortable being tagged with it even during peace time. Man the rating of 1 star was still clearly illogical based on what you wrote. You should just honestly write that you don't like this type work so you rated it as such. Trying to put it in words and getting them wrong is bad for other readers who wanna try it.
Naruto is not a random person so everyone neglects to confirm his claims through the Yamanaka, especially his accusation of betraying the village
LordFish:Also Danzo was involved in all that stuff. Why are you asking about Yamanaka clan checking him when this whole thing may as well be plotted by others.
One star because of my disappointment with the events. If the rest of the readers want to read, it is their right, as it's my right to put one star
LordFish:You do not how actually FTG work. A marker or something is needed and Orochimaru already knows he can use it since he publicly used in the chunin battle. Meaning he can restrict or remove it. And you should think how even in the original it was the same, Minato only tagged enemies with it. Because no one is comfortable being tagged with it even during peace time. Man the rating of 1 star was still clearly illogical based on what you wrote. You should just honestly write that you don't like this type work so you rated it as such. Trying to put it in words and getting them wrong is bad for other readers who wanna try it.
Ahh I didn't mean it in any mean way before. I just wanted to let you know to write the fact that you do not like this type of story itself at the start so others can be aware. I typed as I'd usually speak with expressions so it came off wrong. And obito did not know till the he got attacked that he has a mark on him. And you're comparing different things here the mark isn't part of space-time category but sealing jutsu. Only the usage of it requires space-time mastery. And also Obito doesn't master space-time jutsu too. As hinted alot, the jutsu from mangekyo usually comes with the desire of the user. Obitos wish when he awakened it was to be away from reality. So he basically got a Doraemon door which is fixed in location to his personal space. As for the neglect part, I do agree on that and will just wait if the author is going to clarify something or just let it slide (though that would be a disappointment.
Mohamed_Allam:There is something you may not have noticed throughout the story, but Obito with one of the most powerful forces of time and space and the legacy of Madara Uchiha and Black Zetsu wasn't unable to remove or resist the FTG tage even after he accompanied the Jubi Jinchuuriki he couldn't do that. And if you say that Minato was died and he don't care. Killer B since he got the tage in the Third Ninja War, he was not able with the help of Kumo(kumo is the best in research) and Hachibi to remove the mark and it remained until the fourth war, when Minato moved to it to transfer the Biju Dama of the Jubi.
My friend, if i am not interested in the story, I will not read it to chapter 16, and I will not wait daily for a new chapter to be uploaded. As for the Obito part, there is a difference in views about the nature of his power, but I, with it being a space and time force. There, is whole another dimension that he can moves himself, others and objects from it and to it. I can only see it as a space and time force. As for the mark, I don't remember mentioning that he didn't notice it because I haven't seen Naruto for years. But I think 17 years is long enough to notice it.
LordFish:Ahh I didn't mean it in any mean way before. I just wanted to let you know to write the fact that you do not like this type of story itself at the start so others can be aware. I typed as I'd usually speak with expressions so it came off wrong. And obito did not know till the he got attacked that he has a mark on him. And you're comparing different things here the mark isn't part of space-time category but sealing jutsu. Only the usage of it requires space-time mastery. And also Obito doesn't master space-time jutsu too. As hinted alot, the jutsu from mangekyo usually comes with the desire of the user. Obitos wish when he awakened it was to be away from reality. So he basically got a Doraemon door which is fixed in location to his personal space. As for the neglect part, I do agree on that and will just wait if the author is going to clarify something or just let it slide (though that would be a disappointment.
