Great concept. the smiling critters being summoned is awesome and is extreme interesting quirk idea. the grammar can still be improved but overall is not really that bad. the character and story developement is great tho the time skip seems like mc put no more thought into his quirk. overall great fic cant wait for more. ps. in one chapter you asked for abillity ideas for the other critters so here is my suggestion. tho please add on to it as its barebones Each of the critters has a discription on the wiki. You could make there abilities match that. Ps you could always add on to this or not. Tho these are very barebones ——— Bobby bearhug = her abilities could be something allong the lines like healing as her discription says she his a kind and caring soul. ——— Bubba bubbaphant = he is the brains of the critters so you can have him have something like the rat that is the teacher but stronger ——— Craftycorn = she is the artistic one so something like a crafting ability maybe ——— Dogday = he is the strong and determined leader so maybe a strength and regen ability ——— Hoppy hopscotch = she is the energetic one that can’t stay still and likes to hop. So her ability could be like Jessica jones so superstrengh and speed. ——— Kickingchicken = he is the “cool kid” that doesn’t back down/when he get kicked down he gets right back up. So probably super durability and strength in his legs ——— I got no clue for pickypiggy as I mean her role in the group is to make sure that the group eats healthy. Tho in the game we learn that she might have eaten the other critters and is ver deceptive as she say let’s be friends to the player and right before she says that she is still hungry. After mentioning grilled chicken dear elephant and flayed unicorn.
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