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BobbyBrowne
BobbyBrowneLv21yr
2023-09-09 13:12

I genuinely find it extremely difficult to come up with anything unique or enjoyable about this novel. Every single character is either one dimensional or just unlikable. Mc's dad is just a doting father who gets shrugged off every scene he's in, Mc himself is just some psychopathic loser whose actions make no sense whatsoever. He likes torturing people for some reason which has still not been explained at ch 60 and he has just remained so unbelievably unlikable. Why is he hiding his power I literally can't fathom it there is not a single valid reason to do so if he wants to actually get strong. There is so much more to talk about but bottom line, any metric you can think of rating this novel with does not go over 3/5

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moon_senpai
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Well, mc's past is revealed in the later chapters and that answers everything you pointed out in your review. His past life is directly connected to the type of person he is now so I guess it's not a surprise that you'd find his actions unreasonable. Idk if you read further or not so in short I'll say he had an extremely traumatic and messed up past.

BobbyBrowne
BobbyBrowneLv2

I understand that's where you're going with it but I think it took way too long to reveal the reason, unless someone likes the psychotic killer type of MC, most people won't stick around for more than 60 chapters to understand why the MC is that way. I mean the MC is one of the most crucial parts of a story and I just think making the MC likable happened too late to really get me attached to the story, among the other things I posted about. Thanks for responding though man I understand criticism isn't the most fun thing to respond to, hope the novel goes well

moon_senpai:Well, mc's past is revealed in the later chapters and that answers everything you pointed out in your review. His past life is directly connected to the type of person he is now so I guess it's not a surprise that you'd find his actions unreasonable. Idk if you read further or not so in short I'll say he had an extremely traumatic and messed up past.
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ysian
ysianLv2

20 chapters in, honest review Facts first: MC is op right from the start, is staying low-key, is very smart. Good points: The writing is not cringe (very little) He was training for 5 years to become from C to B for his stats.(character building) His sister seems to find something odd with zero since his sickness and mc took his place. Potential good development plot. Bad points: I don't really like the 'Status system' in the magical world. MC parents straight up just ask him his stats and did not use tools to ascertain his potential. Then there's the timeskip from his isekai date to 5 years later. It skipped on so much family interaction that could have happened (specially since MC said he became emotionally attached to them like real family) Potential writing on MC coping with the isekai skipped. For all these iskais, i can't help but think these MCs liked the isekai world better and wanted it. Anothet bad plot was the story building to the tournament arc which was basically none. The tournament was just dumped in there and the info that the kingdom's princess would come is also dumped in. Furthermore, this tournament is called 'the best warrior of the decade' but it is conducted in some small city and MCs parents said that Anya was the strongest in the city with average E rank stats. Not much sense. This arc can only be called lazy. For all the supposed grandeur, MC was able to sign in his own sister as a contestant without her knowledge (though he did tell his sister he had a plan). This just shows that the security for the tournament very very low. Again not much sense. Then another thing dumped in there is MC suddenly becomes a smart schemer who sees everyone as a 'piece'. Just like that, no development prior. Mind you he was a normal average guy in his previous life Lastly, the fact that he was able to set an explosive (dunno how he could even know how) under the princess platform is just idiotic. Royalty of a kingdom and any B rank magician can just slide in and harm her life. Where is the security, royal knights. Moreover, after she was saved by Anya (for the plan) ,she comes to MC mansion on the same day! So no going into hiding after an assassination attempt. Following logic, there should be an investigation to find to attackers. But she just travel across the city to MC house wih only 4 guards. No logic. I don't know if the plot building gets better and im not gonna stick around to find out. Just my opinion.

Throwaway12345
Throwaway12345Lv5

Straight up insulting. Another story that is dragged down by the main character. He reincarnates and fails to be genre savvy instead spending wasting their time (and ours) by hiding their power. They join an academy to learn magic and then intentionally flub things to not be noticed. I enjoy this genre and adjacent ones however every enjoyable aspect of the genre is lost by the main character's stupidity. Their attempts at avoiding cliches introduced the ones that waste the reader's time and money the most. Pointlessly hiding power drags out the story instead of diving into the parts that make stories like this enjoyable. Social interactions, world building, the power system, and playing into the MC being genre savvy are what normally make stories like this enjoyable. This story fails on all of these points. Time skipped five years instead of any interaction that proves the MC cares for their parents/family. I don't have an issue with revealing the reincarnation but it isn't exactly in line with the way the MC is presented. A princess is attacked manipulated and taken advantage of and it is all brushed off. Forcing a garbage plotline to occur accurately when events went off rails literally years prior makes no sense. The MC is written as an author of the novel genre they are in, proofread the initial work, failed to identify it despite their sister being a major character with a very obvious name, and flips between eight grader syndrome and cold calculated mastermind. The character acts against the information given about them every time they aren't monologuing. Forced myself to read through most of the free chapters. I kept hoping the MC would actually do something to make the story interesting. They did not.

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