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cafreine
cafreineLv41yr
2023-09-27 10:41

this fic is good, but i dislike the MC due to his immature, im currently in chapter 20/21, and hope mc get character development fast since i dont want to read this fic while cringing at the mc lol

Fate/Mercenary: A travel across the omniverse.

Stuckinapileofbook
4.6
64 Chs

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Stuckinapileofbook
StuckinapileofbookAuthor

Thanks you for the review He does acts quite childish yes, but with time he needs use his mature side.

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cafreine
cafreineLv4

yeah, hope MC get mature soon, dunno how many time i skip the chapter since im cringing at MC lol, luckily i still barely know the plot

Stuckinapileofbook:Thanks you for the review He does acts quite childish yes, but with time he needs use his mature side.
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Stuckinapileofbook
StuckinapileofbookAuthor

bro hahaha

cafreine:yeah, hope MC get mature soon, dunno how many time i skip the chapter since im cringing at MC lol, luckily i still barely know the plot
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cafreine
cafreineLv4

oh ya, before im done with my "complaining arc", u will not using ntr to MC for "character development" right?

Stuckinapileofbook:bro hahaha
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Stuckinapileofbook
StuckinapileofbookAuthor

Nooo, god no. I hate those kind of "Character Development"

cafreine:oh ya, before im done with my "complaining arc", u will not using ntr to MC for "character development" right?
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