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2022-06-15 08:43

I like how you make this fic fresh and unique with the OC MC and the Au plotline. Relationships between characters also feel very natural and overall entertaining to read. The gamer system is also well done. Not always more functions equals a better system. I like how your system is simple and easy to understand, yet there is still that excitement which comes with rising numbers in skill levels. You should definitely continue in writing this. I can't wait to see what this fic will look like with more chapters and a more developed plot.

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that's dopamine for you~! the numbers, that is

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Truely good story like the rest of Fanharem's work. One of the few authors that continously puts out good stuff. If you've read Jordinio's naruto story then you'll already know how the system works, for those that haven't, it's all about the grind. lol The story is set just before the second shinobi war and the MC is five years old. As alot happens in the war expect the first 60ish chapters to take place during this time period as the MC will be a kid, no lemons for you, yet. The author takes a more realistic view of the world and therefore what would happen in a war (I've already seen one review where they whine about 'everybody is r*ping') so if that's too much for you, sorry. But I will state that none of it is described or 'on screen' but heavily implied and discussed by characters. The world if filling out well, but the only gripe I have is that the MC has no real motivation outside of the harem, everything is for the harem, which is eternal. *Slightly spoilery* As to the supposed *slave seal*, the seal that the MC is given by a clan head is to basically insure that the MC doesn't kill or cause irreparable harm to the clan hier, who is the MC's charge. It's explicitly stated that all the seal does is keep the MC from thinking or acting maliciously agains the clan heir (who is the MC's friend). How that equals a slave seal to others, I'm not sure. The clan head requests the seal as they've only know the MC for a few weeks, at best, and they want a little bit of insurance while they try to make ties with the MC and their clan. The MC accepts as they will be rewarded with a ton of multiple clans secret techniques by the system and the MC knows that the seal doesn't cause any major restrictions and they could get out of it if desired. Which proves true as the seal is removed pretty early on. I write this as the number one review gives inaccurate and incomplete statements about the seal and I'd rather not see a reader that may enjoy this turn away because of false impressions. Really the seal is a non-issue and is almost forgotten until it's brought up again upon it's removal, it has zero impact on the story or character development.

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