Honestly, you'd have to turn your brain off to read. The character doesn't think things through and simply does, causing him to not only look stupid to the audience but suspicious to the other characters. Quality was below what I could handle, and the characters were built weaker than the original, not in strength but in character itself. If you're willing to read a wish fulfillment with poor grammar, I'd recommend skipping the comments as it only makes it harder to read. In order of fixing this, I'd personally get Grammarly to fix the grammatical problems, research the characters and original story before writing them, and maybe apply "What would I do?" Throughout the story to retain complex thinking. In the end, 3.8 Stars. Writing Quality: 3/5 Stability of Updates: 5/5 Story Development: 3/5 Character Design: 3/5 (Generous considering the first few chapters) World Background: 5/5 (Literally DBZ)
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