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neobenmike
neobenmikeLv52yr
2022-08-02 22:09

First few chaps were okay and then went downhill from there.

I'm Gohan!

LordPhenex026
4.2
169 Chs

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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026Author

If you don't give any explanation to support your rewiew, it is difficult to take it into account...

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LoyalCultivator
LoyalCultivatorLv4

What u mean this is a great novel/fanfic

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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Why make the effort for something you don't like?

LordPhenex026:If you don't give any explanation to support your rewiew, it is difficult to take it into account...
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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026Author

Because you can't comment on something without solid backing. Otherwise, you would remain as a person without his own criteria.

InternetSaint:Why make the effort for something you don't like?
2yr
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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Can you say that again but in English?

LordPhenex026:Because you can't comment on something without solid backing. Otherwise, you would remain as a person without his own criteria.
2yr
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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026Author

If you can't read it's not my problem. There are plenty of schools in the world to learn to read...

InternetSaint:Can you say that again but in English?
2yr
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InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

Are you on drugs?

LordPhenex026:If you can't read it's not my problem. There are plenty of schools in the world to learn to read...
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Daoist_Father
Daoist_FatherLv15

lol i think author-san wants you to explain what you thought was bad about the book so he may understand if he made a mistake anywhere. constuctive critisism is a thing and some authors enjoy learning where they f'ed up and hopefully emprove on it

2yr
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Leo_Bayona_1541
Leo_Bayona_1541Lv2

they have always been good

2yr
Mohamedk123
Mohamedk123Lv4

1: you can tho or u can call something good with give criteria 2: that make him a personbthat just don’t say his criteria

LordPhenex026:Because you can't comment on something without solid backing. Otherwise, you would remain as a person without his own criteria.
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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026Author

Reveal spoiler

2yr

Zaelum
ZaelumLv5

Nice!, I like it, good story, and it will probably follow the canon, but I still hope you change things a little. '18 is my waifu!!!' [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

2yr
Fightas89
Fightas89Lv14

well gonna drop the fanfic now. writing quality and stabaility of updates is quite alright. problem is author forces to keep powerlvl of gohan down to so he can follow the cannon and gohan doesnt get too op. Issue is MC is suppose to be quite smart...even more when readers picked that out and facts later show that reader where totally right, author is just totally toxic and tells readers there comments are stupid...So the forced canon kinda makes the world background and story development bad. All in all I enoyed the start of the fanfic but the quality droped quite fast and It got poison.

2yr
rubber_band123
rubber_band123Lv5

The writing quality is equivalent of the average chinese novel. so ehh... Story Development is eh... Character Design is also eh... nothing special but nothing out of the ordinary or OCC. Until the Yamcha incident. Keep reading to know why. oh I also got insulted as Yamcha fanboy for giving valid criticism lol World Background is also eh. The novel doesn't really explore the world building then again its a fanfiction. Most ff don't even bother w this part. So let's talk about the Yamcha incident. Let me explain like those 4chan story because it much more fun. >be me a ff enjoyer >reading a DBZ ff >hoping it be a good a ff where it fix many mistake that Toriyama made such as neglecting the OG series such as Krillin, Yamcha, and Tien. >yamcha become much much stronger >yamcha IQ is lowered to room temperature for some reason >become a comic relief telling the enemy about the Dragonball because? >still die to sibamen suicidal attack >me criticize author for writing Yamcha so Out Of Character >got called as Yamcha fanboy in return LOL ff author aren't the most mature being but this is just childish. Don't bother reading. Look elsewhere maybe fanfiction.net.

2yr
AinzO0alGown
AinzO0alGownLv14

Go Gohan Go Go to Piccolo Go Gohan Dodge I said DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODGE!!!

2yr
JoSauer
JoSauerLv14

its allaround pretty meh. The grammar is terrible, writing is ok but also a bit boring, consisteny/logic are also kind of bad. I can only recommend this to people who are realy desperate for dragon ball fanfics.

2yr
Baldysalino
BaldysalinoLv13

the grammar honestly sucks, and the author has made no attempt to fix it. the story design is meh, as they simply just follow the plot. the author has made the characters stupider then the original show and that says a lot. the plot also feels forced. over all, needs lots of improvements.

2yr
Barnacleboy
BarnacleboyLv15

Its really good since I haven’t seen a lot of love for Gohan in other fanfics. My only and biggest issue is that he has a really big mouth. Why does he keep saying stuff that he shouldn’t know when he doesn’t need to ? It just take any immersion in had out of the story.

2yr
Kajesti
KajestiLv3

Reveal spoiler

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