Honestly, To much freaking details and explanations. like seriously. I'm glad you know your stuff and all but making entire chapters basically info dump kills the story fast. it's fine to give a brief explanation but don't use the entire freaking chapter. The story had an interesting concept and was looking forward to reading it but not so much anymore. only like 5 chaps at most and I'm already dropping it because I hate info dumps. If you don't mind that kind of thing then this might be a good story for you. Heck I don't even mind slow building stories as long as it's entertaining and doesn't have mile long explanations. That's why I'm giving a lot a 3 because I neither like nor hate this story other than the fact I'm dropping it. My suggestion to you author is to not put to much information and explanations in the chapters. If we are curious about something, then we can look it up to find out ourselves. Not hating on ya but just giving some advice. I'm a writer to though I don't post stories online because I don't want to have to get a schedule to upload chaps. Anyways, good luck and enjoy.
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