All I got to say, the narration is boring. although the concept was fine, and the plot is bland, no character introduction, but self development. don't know it is because I like fast pace. so not for people like me. keep up the good work and improve. all the best.
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don't forget about the random time travelers and random enemy's that get mentioned then never hear about them again the plots all over the place could have kept the normal plot and changed it from there but what we got was a weird plot with so many holes that not even flex tape can fix it so I dropped it because it feels like we are going down a road that only has a right turn and you know that it does but some how we go left just feels like the auther throws ideas seeing if one sticks then if it doesn't then move on and throwing another one to repeat the process not even bothering to fix it and the drama is so dumb it's like having it for the sake of drama when clearly it wasn't needed
