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2023-01-10 21:35

I am reading this book, but don't love it. I think I could very easily LOVE this story, but with very heavy editing and some rewriting! There are a lot of mistakes in the writing, the flow doesn't work the best, characters are immature and unrealistic, and it drags out every little detail. I have skipped around a hundred chapters so far, and could have very easily skipped a lot more. The best writing is definitely from Chloes perspective or Chloe and Vernon's interactions. Anything from Pracilla's perspective could be completely skipped, most to all from Vincent's perspective could be skipped, or seriously condensed. There is a LOT of repeating the same exact thing over and over in different wording, sometimes like 3 whole chapters. It feels like the story is JUST FINALLY STARTING to develop and it is like 450 chapters in. It should have been to this point and character development MUCH earlier. I have dropped this book several times, then started back on the current chapter when I didn't have anything else I was currently reading, without feeling like I missed anything. Hope that Chloe will finally get a happy ending keeps having me come back, but ready to just skip straight to that ending.

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