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2022-11-15 19:18

The story and characters in themselves are very good. But the book drags quite a bit. We’re at 350 chapters now and there is finally a glimpse of some character and story development. I feel that it could have been edited down by more than half of what has been written. I will continue reading because the story is unique and I definitely want to see what happens.

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