My main issue is the writing style. The timeline is all over the place. One chapter starts at mid day the halfway through thw chapter it switches to what happened earlier that day. Then the progress to the next day then the go back the the previous day afternoon. It's fine for a story to do this from time to time but when the whole story is written like this it gets annoying. I'm reading a novel for entertainment not to solve a puzzle of the timeline.
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