Item: A Noble Daughter's Reprisal
Rating: 4
Author: Harleeyah24

Harleeyah24Lv42yr

2022-09-07 01:33

I've only read 5 chapters and I'm already so hooked! I love the fact that you use very little filling words and sentences and the story jumpstarts right from the first scene. I have mixed feelings about the first chapter however, I think you might need to look back at it and do a re-write because it feels very different from the general quality of the rest of your chapters. I also think you should describe what Eva feels for Hans at first sight more subtly. It feels a bit too much to say "her knees felt weak" when it was only their first meeting and they didn't even interact at all. The plot seems very interesting so far and I love the development of the storyline and how there are already plot-twists right from the start! I must also mention that I love how the MC expresses herself so well in every situation, and how you even add her internal dialogues, although some actions seem too much and some descriptions could be expressed softer. The only reason I'm not giving you a 5 star is because of the little grammatical errors here and there but that's nothing to worry about. You can always re-read and edit when you have time. Asides that, I love this story so far and I can't wait to continue reading and follow Eva's journey!

A Noble Daughter's Reprisal

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