NOTE TO AUTHOR ON SYNOPSIS: I came from your last novel wondering why there were no updates. I haven't read this yet but as with the last novel I corrected your synopsis. You only used the draft version of my corrections in the previous novel and never saw the final copy which was a shame but it doesn't matter, I made this correction the final draft for this. Few things to be noted. It sounds really strange that you don't identify the MCs name, it makes it awkward, especially the first sentence, it's normal to transition to "he" after a name has been introduced but without a name, it's a bit strange. It's like introducing abbreviations and acronyms, you don't introduce a concept like RAID to those who wouldn't know what it is. Instead you would say Redundant Array of Independent Disks (RAID) and continue along with RAID. Similar concept. Only the first "his" really needs to be changed. Again, I haven't read this yet so it should be: "In Billy's first life", "In Joes' first life" and then you can naturally transition to he/him, etc But this is just my opinion, you don't need to use any of it, obviously \\\\\\\\\\\SYNOPSIS BELOW\\\\\\\\\\\\ In his first life, losing the one he loved most, he fell into depression, as grief overshadowed his life and death knocked on his door. He thought that he would finally be free from the nightmare but his life was far from over. He was reborn again. In his second life, he was reborn as the youngest prince of the strongest empire and born with a silver spoon. He was married to five beautiful goddesses. His first wife was the Empress of the neighboring kingdom. His second wife was the Saintess of the Church. His third wife was the daughter of the wealthiest merchant group. His fourth wife is the Goddess of War on the battlefield. His fifth wife was an assassin known as the Shadow Queen, who had been raised as his caretaker. But who was he? He was just an imbecile, an idiot, a disgusting fat pig who was ostracized and spat upon by society. Unable to tolerate his son, the Emperor cut him off from his family tree, stripping his title as Prince and banished him to a small vassal state for the rest of his life. The Vassal State which was in disarray and had been usurped by the nobles was on verge of destruction. Until one day lightning struck him, and pulled by the mysterious strings of fate, his soul ended up in The Sanctum of Goddess. And from there, his myth begins...
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LIKEI guess the last line could also be modified, it's a bit weird. The Sanctum of Goddess sounds very wrong, it would be more natural to say the Sanctum of The Goddess (assuming her title is The Goddess) so either the Sanctum of the Goddess or the Sanctum of The Goddess or if there are multiple Goddess, then the Sanctum of Goddesses
Thanks for the help man. First thing, my exam is going on and after it, there is going to run for joining the university and many other things as you know what students after college do, so I am not writing anything and my mother is had even ceased my phone. My new novel had a stockpile which I have been preparing since March as you might know WSA is a very big thing for an author. The Extra Survival will resume from August 1. Even the posting of the chapter is done by a friend of mine whom I have given the account. Now about the draft, I remember correcting it two times as you have sent the synopsis and I haven't seen the third one which I might have missed. I get 60-70 comments of which 5-6 would be useful rest are just curses so I have stopped looking for comments for a while due to which I might have missed the final correction. Like I have made an announcement and added a chapter saying that I didn't drop the novel and my exams are going on but people without reading it are spamming in the chapter box which is unbearable. And about the title, it can't be changed once set and I didn't mistake rather I felt bad taste when pronouncing Goddesses. Still, thanks for the help man, and I promise I will change this synopsis and try to find the other one when my exams are over. Until then, if you like The Extra Survival, please note that it is not dropped.
Ah, I see, I understand, do what you have to do, real life takes priority. If you want the final draft I believe I posted it in a review in the previous novel. And I can imagine you get many useless comments so I'm not surprised, just figured I would stop by and help a bit since I had time.
Mohitkumar:Thanks for the help man. First thing, my exam is going on and after it, there is going to run for joining the university and many other things as you know what students after college do, so I am not writing anything and my mother is had even ceased my phone. My new novel had a stockpile which I have been preparing since March as you might know WSA is a very big thing for an author. The Extra Survival will resume from August 1. Even the posting of the chapter is done by a friend of mine whom I have given the account. Now about the draft, I remember correcting it two times as you have sent the synopsis and I haven't seen the third one which I might have missed. I get 60-70 comments of which 5-6 would be useful rest are just curses so I have stopped looking for comments for a while due to which I might have missed the final correction. Like I have made an announcement and added a chapter saying that I didn't drop the novel and my exams are going on but people without reading it are spamming in the chapter box which is unbearable. And about the title, it can't be changed once set and I didn't mistake rather I felt bad taste when pronouncing Goddesses. Still, thanks for the help man, and I promise I will change this synopsis and try to find the other one when my exams are over. Until then, if you like The Extra Survival, please note that it is not dropped.