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2023-01-28 13:59

Review after chapter 217. Overall the novel and it's progression is good. However, there are a few quirks. Firstly, his background on earth is not defined or limited. For example, what year did he leave earth? How much knowledge does he really have about weapon making? Is he genius enough to create new futuristic technology without any assistance? Next the gun strength seems a bit off. However, that can be fixed by explaining why each gun can kill specific ranks of beasts or humans. Additionally, the limits and reason for things can be defined a bit better. For example, why certain technology exists in a country, but the rest of technology is pretty archaic. Or why someone had a specific type of technology but people above him do not have similar advanced tech. Most importantly, the story needs an editor. The English is good enough to get across the story, however, the errors definitely break immersion. This story could jump to a 4.5 and top rated novel if the previous and future chapters are edited. Keep up the work!

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