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As an "adult with so much wordly experience", is he so delued to think that leaving the academy will automatically make the fugitives safe? Just because he leaves the academy does not mean they won't kill the people they want to....
This is confusing. He is walking with fugitives and then is surprised when they are stopped? He said already "They will expect us to go to the academy so that's where they will go first" If you knew they went to the academy, then they will report the description of the fugutives and anyone with them will also be arrested. It's no brain stuff.. It's already weird that he just collects strays, but the surprise at having to bear with the results of his actions... Really? I already know plot armor will solve this, but the forced situations are difficult to read.
Review after chapter 217. Overall the novel and it's progression is good. However, there are a few quirks. Firstly, his background on earth is not defined or limited. For example, what year did he leave earth? How much knowledge does he really have about weapon making? Is he genius enough to create new futuristic technology without any assistance? Next the gun strength seems a bit off. However, that can be fixed by explaining why each gun can kill specific ranks of beasts or humans. Additionally, the limits and reason for things can be defined a bit better. For example, why certain technology exists in a country, but the rest of technology is pretty archaic. Or why someone had a specific type of technology but people above him do not have similar advanced tech. Most importantly, the story needs an editor. The English is good enough to get across the story, however, the errors definitely break immersion. This story could jump to a 4.5 and top rated novel if the previous and future chapters are edited. Keep up the work!
This was my sentiment after quitting at 512. I stayed much longer than I should have tbh. Waiting over 500 chapters for a glimpse is really not enough satisfaction. I can understand people liking it for the regression vrmmo side, but for the people that came in for the interaction with the real world, I'm assuming they were heavily disappointed.
Honestly, I just posted a review saying about the same thing. Scenes are drawn out for no reason; it's truly difficult to read until chapter 100 even when skimming. The first 80 chapters can probably be edited to end up being 30. This is something you should really consider doing but I doubt it will happen. On the note about drawing out scenes to make the MC look awesome, it actually just makes him look incompetent. Being awesome would be handling problems quickly and efficiently.
The story is a chore to read. So much unnecessary text that just ruins every single paragraph. Details are added that really offer nothing to the story. The flow of the story is also awful. For example,, extended back stories for simple things. There was a 6 chapter backstory about a situation that only needed 50 words within the first 60 chapters. Imagine how insane that is, 1/10 of the picture on a backstop that does not matter... Those chapters would have been better off used for info dumps or world building. My suggestion is to skim read because there is a lot of filler and the climaxes so far have been pretty lackluster. The grammar is decent, can definitely do with some work though. There are a lot of chapters though, so the author probably updates often and is consistent.
Nothing is explained. The author just adds random stuff and assumes you will find a way to justify it. Especially the fight scenes; they make no sense. Descriptions of scenarios are lacking and then the author says something you know is impossible in the scenario and throws any image you had created or rationalized out the window.
Ugh i cant do this anymore. The interactions are just so cringe. Like do I have to read through these scenarios every 3 chapters? Also, does the school have no structure? 2nd years high above the level of 1st years just beat up the kids in public with no repercussions? And dont say its it encourage the students to grow stronger, that only really applies for the same year. Also, people can just steal money from other's cards? that makes no sense. There has to be some sort of system to stop that or at least track and punish it.