This FF was the first one I ever wrote and I feel that I have really done it justice with the new rewrite..................................................
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LIKEEven in the last on he was still made from her soul. Just the relaxation ship between them was maater and servant. Thought it be better to have them more related.
Daybreak_6987:It is a lot better feels more like a 4 to 5 star main character now as he’s been given a better start. I also like how the Primordial concept/deity of death is his mother this time should be interesting.
ah so he's not a servant now?? cause that actually threw me off a bit last time he didn't really seem like a character to listen to others after all
BlackSwordman1234:Even in the last on he was still made from her soul. Just the relaxation ship between them was maater and servant. Thought it be better to have them more related.
What choice did he have? She is gave him his second life and can always take it away. He knew that fact and she was doing things for his sake.
killersoul:ah so he's not a servant now?? cause that actually threw me off a bit last time he didn't really seem like a character to listen to others after all
mm I wasn't saying it was bad just felt it didn't fit his character that came of like he'd do whatever he saw fit still a good book thou
BlackSwordman1234:What choice did he have? She is gave him his second life and can always take it away. He knew that fact and she was doing things for his sake.
you know I'm reading this version now and while it's indeed better idea wise I honestly think your grammar on the original was much better from what I remember and well I also wanted to mention pretty much all the mistakes I've been reading could be fixed if you used grammarly or some equivalent
I do use it. If anything, my grammer is better than before. That will always stick with me and it’s not that bad.
killersoul:you know I'm reading this version now and while it's indeed better idea wise I honestly think your grammar on the original was much better from what I remember and well I also wanted to mention pretty much all the mistakes I've been reading could be fixed if you used grammarly or some equivalent
no it's actually better than most on this site just a couple words here and there misspelled is all and really?? meh if you say so it has been a long time since I read the old one so I'll take your word for it
BlackSwordman1234:I do use it. If anything, my grammer is better than before. That will always stick with me and it’s not that bad.