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LordRinun
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2023-07-25 11:25

This fanfic is not bad but I have a huge problem with the interactions of the characters. The way they communicate with each other sounds so bland, like they don't have any emotions at all. It just feels a little bit mechanical, when they talk. I have only read up to the first 5 chapters, so I'm not entirely sure if this applies to the latest chapters. This is my first time making a review, I'm sorry if it sounds harsh. It's just not for me but keep going Author.

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BlackSwordman1234
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This was the first fanfic I wrote so I had little clue how to make good dialogue

LordRinun
LordRinunLv4

Understandable, everyone starts somewhere. Keep up the grind Author!

BlackSwordman1234:This was the first fanfic I wrote so I had little clue how to make good dialogue
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