webnovel
dark_fenrir
dark_fenrirLv42yr
2022-06-01 18:40

I want moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee ( I came because I said you gonna upload more )πŸ˜€

Liked by 4 people

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
DaoistfsfYhQ
DaoistfsfYhQLv1

Really when I saw the title it caught my attention, but even more so when I saw its rating. Unfortunately I am disappointed. The story is insipid, you don't feel any connection with the main character and the time jumps are overused, the battles are hardly felt, as far as the harem meh, if each one is useful in their own way, but they are so forgettable that I don't even know who is who anymore, after having paused the story for a couple of days. The system is perhaps the most redeemable since it is its point of originality, but it loses that potential with the way you narrate the story, although it is valid that it is in the third person, but you turn it into a series of mechanized events. Also why did you have to add the setting to your lucky looting system? ("Where they hunt the protagonist"), there was no need if your system was to create war dogs and not the other, for that I better read novels of the villain of destiny. The world background, at first, is interesting, but then it fades and I emphasize that it is due to the abuse of time jumps, which as a result only knows the organization of the protagonist as for the rest, it only leaves a vague idea. Well, and I have among others... now it's worth reading, it depends on the type of development you want, if you just like a story with bombardments of sometimes unnecessary information, well this novel is your thing, but if you want to connect with the story in yes, better turn around that this feels one-dimensional. Finally, author you have good ideas, but you have executed it poorly, in my honest opinion it would be best if you rewrite the story, because to be honest your story feels more like a school textbook than a novel itself.

Related Stories

My SSS-Rank Class Is Blood Monarch!

'Divinity Online'. The new breakthrough in the Full-Immersion Virtual Reality technology. After decades of work, Divinity Corp had achieved the impossible. Creating a massive video game world that people can enter and live in as if it were Earth. Their goal was clear, to create a world other than Earth that we can call home. A place where the laws of reality vanish, and the true ceiling of power shifts completely. Naturally, the shockwave Divinity Online created across the entire globe was unlike anything else. Every single person has heard of it, even those who have had no interest in video games before. Giant corporations and even governments immediately rushed to start planning to invest in this new world and just like that, billions of people had their eyes on one single date: the 19th of July. *** Arthur, like everyone else, had heard of the game and was as excited as everyone else to try it, if not even more. With how much he grew bored of his life on earth, this fantasy world was like the divine call he had been searching for. However, there was a very small problem. He had no money to buy the machine required to access Divinity Online. His wretched life had turned him into a broke teenager with no parents, and no relatives. But, by some kind of luck, he got his hands on one of those machines. Not knowing what was awaiting him in that world, Arthur was simply seeking one thing... A new opportunity in life and to find a purpose he could work for when he had none so far. [Welcome to 'Divinity Online'.] [Assimilation Started...]

Frost_Bite8 Β· Fantasy
4.1
396 Chs

What Do You Mean There Are Other Transmigrators In My Harem Fantasy?

In the most cliched fashion, a giant truck-kun smashed into my World, killing everyone with it. And in the next most cliched event, I was given a second chance in life by the gods to live another life in a world of swords, magic and dragons! It’s literally a dream come true! Be a hero? Who has the time?! Conquer the world? Like hell I’ll do something so troublesome! Diving into dungeons, exploring ancient ruins and meeting all the weirdos of the world? Sign me right up!! I’m only interested in travelling the world to find the most interesting materials I can use to write the best story I can! I’ll show you my creativity and dazzle this new world with the stories I’ll write! I’ll fight with dragons, swim with krakens, wrestle giants, eat all the cakes and bed the beauties! Time to live this life however I want! Eh? A psycho is running around the world saying that they are the hero who will slay the demon lord? Why is there such a crazy person? There’s someone out there threatening the world with nukes? How did they even find out how to make those? Some crazy hobo is going into other people’s houses to smash pots to look for money? That guy really must be crazy. What Do You Mean There Are Other Transmigrators In My Harem Fantasy? ----- [Character Creation:] [Gender:] [Male] [Female] >[Futa] *** Notes: Any R-rated scenes will be denoted by a '*' followed by an 'R' with the number of 'R's showing how much of it is R-rated. '*R' would be around 25%, '*RR' would be about 50% and '*RRR' would most likely be the entire chapter. You can join our discord through this link: https://discord.gg/CRrb56c

Draekai Β· Fantasy
4.2
1019 Chs