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2022-06-09 22:55

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Really when I saw the title it caught my attention, but even more so when I saw its rating. Unfortunately I am disappointed. The story is insipid, you don't feel any connection with the main character and the time jumps are overused, the battles are hardly felt, as far as the harem meh, if each one is useful in their own way, but they are so forgettable that I don't even know who is who anymore, after having paused the story for a couple of days. The system is perhaps the most redeemable since it is its point of originality, but it loses that potential with the way you narrate the story, although it is valid that it is in the third person, but you turn it into a series of mechanized events. Also why did you have to add the setting to your lucky looting system? ("Where they hunt the protagonist"), there was no need if your system was to create war dogs and not the other, for that I better read novels of the villain of destiny. The world background, at first, is interesting, but then it fades and I emphasize that it is due to the abuse of time jumps, which as a result only knows the organization of the protagonist as for the rest, it only leaves a vague idea. Well, and I have among others... now it's worth reading, it depends on the type of development you want, if you just like a story with bombardments of sometimes unnecessary information, well this novel is your thing, but if you want to connect with the story in yes, better turn around that this feels one-dimensional. Finally, author you have good ideas, but you have executed it poorly, in my honest opinion it would be best if you rewrite the story, because to be honest your story feels more like a school textbook than a novel itself.

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