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The_reader_ofnovel
The_reader_ofnovelLv141yr
2023-02-28 23:41

The novel starts great but slowly turns into a story about your typical lustful protagonist who’s soul reason for anything and everything he does is not to grow as a person but to have a stupidly unrealistic harem. the women become brain dead and completely useless in battle because they are so weak compared to the mc it is so disappointing.

Fate: Dead Man's Lament [Rewrite Up]

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Huntsman
HuntsmanAuthor

Seriously, what do you expect a bunch of 10 year old children to do? Leo has the Game to offset the disadvantages of his age, Rin, Shiro and everyone else don't. Shiro even put up a decent fight against Zouken's Worms, but the matchup is rigged in the Worm's favor from the beginning. Rin's Magecraft literally revolves around *Gems* which she doesn't have because canonically, she's dirt poor thanks to Kotomine ruining her inheritance, meamwhile Gil is quite literally stopping Zouken's army of magical familiars. Seriously, what are you talking about?!

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Venerable_Read3r
Venerable_Read3rLv5

Then what about the Y#ri i stopped reading when ciri says she has a thing for triss it isnt a harem if the girls have a thing for each other and the mc its just polycule at this point if its y#ri during s#x With the mc only and not outside without the mc with no romance involved then its a harem

Huntsman:Seriously, what do you expect a bunch of 10 year old children to do? Leo has the Game to offset the disadvantages of his age, Rin, Shiro and everyone else don't. Shiro even put up a decent fight against Zouken's Worms, but the matchup is rigged in the Worm's favor from the beginning. Rin's Magecraft literally revolves around *Gems* which she doesn't have because canonically, she's dirt poor thanks to Kotomine ruining her inheritance, meamwhile Gil is quite literally stopping Zouken's army of magical familiars. Seriously, what are you talking about?!
1yr
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TheAngels
TheAngelsLv2

I read that there is ntr with kotomine, is it true?

Venerable_Read3r:Then what about the Y#ri i stopped reading when ciri says she has a thing for triss it isnt a harem if the girls have a thing for each other and the mc its just polycule at this point if its y#ri during s#x With the mc only and not outside without the mc with no romance involved then its a harem
1yr
Venerable_Read3r
Venerable_Read3rLv5

Idk so far until i stopped reading there hasn't been any but who Knows Besides some people use Ntr wrong so don't sweat it until you read it

TheAngels:I read that there is ntr with kotomine, is it true?
1yr
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The_reader_ofnovel
The_reader_ofnovelLv14

There is tons of yuri in this novel. practically every female that is supposed to love and be in a relationship with the mc is gay for there friends or other females. The mc just lets it happen and acts like a cuck.this was so disappointing.

TheAngels:I read that there is ntr with kotomine, is it true?
1yr
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LewdSenPai
LewdSenPaiLv12

eh? really? I was just leisurely looking at Fate Fanfic and stopped by here, thanks for sharing it.

The_reader_ofnovel:There is tons of yuri in this novel. practically every female that is supposed to love and be in a relationship with the mc is gay for there friends or other females. The mc just lets it happen and acts like a cuck.this was so disappointing.
1yr
10
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FinnsRevenge
FinnsRevengeLv4

MC is whiny, tells others about his system in Ep 1 for some God awful reason. Why authors insist on doing this is absolutely mind boggling and annoying. Was really looking forward to a good Magus MC in fate because I enjoy the magecraft aspect of it more than anything else but the fact he goes "I cheated cuz I'm a gamer with an rpg system so don't be sad anymore" is an absolute deal breaker.

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Slushy_Apollo
Slushy_ApolloLv15

Overall a decent novel a little slow paced for what it is supposed to be but my biggest complaint is it legit mentions the gamer system and I read to chapter 20 and all I can say is that garbage is not the gamer system it is missing so much stuff which could be amazing considering the fate universe with dungeons and instead we get none of that

2yr
Synthesia
SynthesiaLv5

It's not a good story. The premise is good but the plot is not. The main character is absolutely awful. He has so many problems and so many conflicting character traits it's quite obvious the author has no idea what he wants with the MC. I made it to chapter 26. The fact he can't fathom being attacked by an organization while actively aiding their enemies is ridiculous. He then strong arms the org he was aiding into helping him get revenge, or the "Deal is off." Despite the fact that there is a Geas and he would have to suffer a severe penalty that he doesn't have the resources to give. As you can probably tell, this incident really bothered me, but its simply the final straw and a series of decisions and plot holes that make absolutely no sense.

2yr
NO_GUD
NO_GUDLv5

Has great potential and is progressing in a good direction currently imo, the chapters are not exactly short and updates seem to be consistent to a decent degree. MC is enjoyable to say the least, he ain't smooth but he got his quirks that probably wouldn't get on your nerves. The story starts off with the MC surviving the Fuyuki city fire by being saved by Gilgamesh when starting his second life. (Note) Gilgamesh and Shirou (Shiro) are genderbent here so far as its AU. I don't think many should have a problem with this because female Gilgamesh is supreme and Shirou is just Shirou.

2yr
Daemon_Anax
Daemon_AnaxLv1

It was interesting until mc revealed his rpg powers. Like it's fine at one point when the story has developed for quite a while but too soon for me and just destroyed my interest . Just not my cup of tea , good luck on future chapters.

1yr
Huntsman
HuntsmanAuthor

Well, it's tradition, so why not? Thank you for reading my story, hopefully you guys can find some enjoyment here, though I don't doubt some might find things they either disagree with, or dislike in this story, but please bear with me, since everything will be addressed in the future.

2yr
schizocat
schizocatLv2

Reveal spoiler

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Phase_MorningStar
Phase_MorningStarLv3

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Adrian_Yanez_3288
Adrian_Yanez_3288Lv4

What happened to the chapters why were they deleted

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