This is good in terms of development, the character is describe in details but not much that it leaves no room for development As for guns and firearms concepts, it's ok but I hope you don't overdo it as many other have done the same and they even brought in many futureristic weapons that it makes the story go insane I would recommend to focus more the development of Dorne rather than just weapen, how they can use sand to create glass and perhaps dive into their Rhony past ancestry.
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