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2022-10-29 05:55

Please take this review with a grain of salt. I've only read up to the early chapters, but I wanted leave my impression so far. Writing Quality 3/5: There's grammar errors such as run-on sentences and some punctuation errors (mostly commas), so I had to read some sentences 2x to understand. Stability of Updates 5/5: The author is doing a great job at pacing and writing chapters consistently! Very much appreciated to make us readers keep coming back to this and having our daily doses. Story Development 3/5: The latest chapters probably had more build up for the overall plot, so I'm just reviewing what I have read up to (the mc going through 2-3 worlds so far). The story progresses veerrry quickly; how the mc progresses through each world, the development between the mc with ml, and how he adapts mentally with changes in his emotions. Character Design 3.8/5: I don't have much to say about the mc & ml and I've probably not read enough for the main characters to show more depth. The ml is OP, but the mc is also OP and can take care of situations himself without the ml's help. I can see mc's character developing with the ml's appearance, but again, (to me) he is quick to adapt his mentality. I do like the little peek in the mc's background that the author revealed that makes this novel different from the other world hopping novels. The antagonists/villains are one dimensional and are pretty much written to be bad to the mc. This is how the mc breezes through world plots, the villains are open books and the mc just needs to face slap. World Background 4/5: Since this is a transmigration novel where mc hops through different worlds, I don't have much to say because these kinda novels are meant to be their own short "plots." I hope this review helps the author.

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