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JohannesAa
JohannesAaLv112yr
2022-05-31 05:27

Great story so far, only complaint is main characters perspective is written as “he” and it gets very confusing in fights and conversations to understand who is doing/saying what. As of chapter 86 into it

Dual System: Ascension of A Nameless Nobody

DelzGB
4.7
258 Chs

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DelzGB
DelzGBAuthor

It's kind of simple. Who is the main character of the POV? Who is the narrative following at that moment? I only use "he" and "she" to refer to the MC of the POV.

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JohannesAa
JohannesAaLv11

Of course it is a simple thing and i Get it, but in my opinion it should atleast be «joeng-hui said» or something with his name at The start of a paragraph, then it is fine to use «he» When u have stated properly who is talking. Sometimes it will be «sol was freaking out» then jump to next paragraph and it will be «this enemy is really tough he thought» or something in this fashion and it actually refering to mc and not sol. Great book though, still reading and story is progressing nicely

DelzGB:It's kind of simple. Who is the main character of the POV? Who is the narrative following at that moment? I only use "he" and "she" to refer to the MC of the POV.
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DelzGB
DelzGBAuthor

It’s always established who is the focus before “he” or “she” is used — I don’t see your point; it’s always set beforehand. Thanks though.

JohannesAa:Of course it is a simple thing and i Get it, but in my opinion it should atleast be «joeng-hui said» or something with his name at The start of a paragraph, then it is fine to use «he» When u have stated properly who is talking. Sometimes it will be «sol was freaking out» then jump to next paragraph and it will be «this enemy is really tough he thought» or something in this fashion and it actually refering to mc and not sol. Great book though, still reading and story is progressing nicely
2yr
jack_volt
jack_voltLv3

is this a harem novel

DelzGB:It's kind of simple. Who is the main character of the POV? Who is the narrative following at that moment? I only use "he" and "she" to refer to the MC of the POV.
2yr
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