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OukisLips
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2022-08-25 07:15

It's not bad. The grammar is average for a fanfic on this app, which means it's barely readable. The problem with this story is that it's entirely too bland and slow-paced. Not only the plot, but the story-telling method is very bland. The story reads like one giant summary. And what little dialogue exists doesn't provide any differentiation between characters. If the author didn't denote who's speaking the reader wouldn't be able to tell because all of the characters have the same "personality" when it comes to dialogue. As far as pacing goes, I mean we're more than 80 2,000-word chapters in and they're still in second year... so make of that what you will

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MaxAkki
MaxAkkiLv5

does the story deviate from canon of does the mc just follow the golden trio ?

OukisLips
OukisLipsLv15

The story does deviate from canon, but does so very slowly. Like I said in the review, we're more than 80 chapters in and still only in second year, so the deviations take quite a while to pay off.

MaxAkki:does the story deviate from canon of does the mc just follow the golden trio ?
Goatless_Pillow
Goatless_PillowLv2

Yiiiiiikes, yeah no I do not have the patience for that, thanks for the warning pal. Fatty out.

OukisLips:The story does deviate from canon, but does so very slowly. Like I said in the review, we're more than 80 chapters in and still only in second year, so the deviations take quite a while to pay off.
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