There is very little understanding of Code Geass in this story, and that bothered me, but my biggest gripe was how aimless the protagonist was. In a dozen chapters there was never any kind of declared or implied purpose for the MC. He just floated around like a jellyfish. You did a good job creating a sense of progression over the decades, and for a bit you showed that you can stay in the pocket and deliver meaningful character interaction, but you ran afoul of starting a story over a century before the source start and then wanting to rush to that start without altering anything. It made Alister very impactless, almost neutered as a protagonist.
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in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
For a story it isn't. look at any successful book ever. they have a clear and impactful goal they strive for and face difficulties to achieve. not, make robot.haha. fight robot. haha. boom. yay.
soldklad:in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
Thanks, that helps me know to avoid this; aimless I can deal with but a mech loving otaku who devotes their lifes purpose to mech fighting? No thanks.
soldklad:in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
Nah, the mc is humane enough to not have just one goal in life, the Mecha thing is just his current goal, It's just like how some people list out some things they wanna do
Ototsu_Yume:Thanks, that helps me know to avoid this; aimless I can deal with but a mech loving otaku who devotes their lifes purpose to mech fighting? No thanks.
pathetic
soldklad:in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
Not, it is not. A person's first priority is their well-being.
soldklad:in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
I am not talking about priority though?
Bob_Uchiha_XD:Not, it is not. A person's first priority is their well-being.
So his brain functions like a super computer and he just wants to ride mechs 🤦and here i thought that he will be progressing his civilization and all.
soldklad:in fact, many things have already changed, only the characters didn't, also the mc does have an aim Wanting mech battles is already a good aim you know, because for me, it is so.
Well, he would be, but thats only a side effect and not his main idea or goal lol
Aashish_Singh:So his brain functions like a super computer and he just wants to ride mechs 🤦and here i thought that he will be progressing his civilization and all.
it's like someone wanting to build a DYI computer and he ended up becoming a semi-professional in the middle of it. I just dont know if this is an apt example though lol
Aashish_Singh:So his brain functions like a super computer and he just wants to ride mechs 🤦and here i thought that he will be progressing his civilization and all.
Well I know that is post is like years ago but the comment the just making robot and battling with them is not a concept then why are you here? ?? My friend CG is like 50% - 70% about that. And maybe mech touch is not famous back then but surely their are some novel with just those two concept as their core right?
Pythia:For a story it isn't. look at any successful book ever. they have a clear and impactful goal they strive for and face difficulties to achieve. not, make robot.haha. fight robot. haha. boom. yay.
you clearly dont understand CG If you think its 50 to 70% about he mechs. ITS more Like 70% Charakter Relations/ Family Bonds, Politic, Warfare, Society and the human Phsycie. The mechs are what they are, tool. but they are still pretty cool to Look at and the Fights are also nice.
DaoistQsggYR:Well I know that is post is like years ago but the comment the just making robot and battling with them is not a concept then why are you here? ?? My friend CG is like 50% - 70% about that. And maybe mech touch is not famous back then but surely their are some novel with just those two concept as their core right?
Hahaha it took a year for someone to notice hahaha Oh my god men did you time it or something hahaha
Nico_Gierth:you clearly dont understand CG If you think its 50 to 70% about he mechs. ITS more Like 70% Charakter Relations/ Family Bonds, Politic, Warfare, Society and the human Phsycie. The mechs are what they are, tool. but they are still pretty cool to Look at and the Fights are also nice.
