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2022-06-20 22:07

OK so I’m a little over halfway through the released chapters and it’s really an interesting story. However, it’s a tough read: the pronouns are an absolute mess (which makes it very difficult to clearly follow) and the chapters are mixed up and half of them are titled “bonus”…whatever that means. Author is in desperate need of an editor! Once this story gets cleaned up I can see it taking off, but right now only a die-hard reader who’s hooked will make the effort to struggle through this. Sorry, I really wanted to give this a higher rating, but this current English released version is just too sloppy.

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thank you. i will try to improve in future

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