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2022-07-29 19:15

Fait pas une fic juste pour être dans l'univers bleach et ne rien suivre du monde franchement c c'inutile Ajouter des oc c débile avec tout les personnages qu'il a dans bleach tubas l'embarras du choix

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''well starting with the following question man only has ''c'' not even an important character in the plot basically ends up here simple you will fit the protagonist in the plot but you don't want to affect it very well I didn't read it since it's not my style we can say it will be a failure unfortunately for the following reason there is not a character that someone would be interested in your ff well ending here the best and you start from the beginning again this time adding some characters that would draw the public's attention with yoruichi, soi fon, rangiku and orihime since it's the basic and draws a lot of public your decision feel free to disagree with me but if you want public you have to write more than just "ocs" characters who won't draw anyone's attention is up to your choice and on the question of limiting harem is something that will take many readers away from your fic since 80% of the webnovel is young and as you know many like a full harem.'' ''well your story has potential but you have to think outside the box get out of the safety zone and look beyond the following of many who say that harem grande spoils ff and nonsense authors who do not know how to take the story well fail to mention some characters more if you're not one of those you'll go far I hope success for you I don't even know if you'll read all this more success there :)'' ******(I used the translator so sorry and try your best to understand that the words will probably be full of mistakes)********

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