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2022-08-31 16:39

there are quite a few mistakes but readable still you should get someone to read your chapter after you write it once so they can fix these mistakes nothing new isnhaopening tbh mc is just following same old plot and like every other BC fanfic he joins black bulls too but that's also not a big deal world building there is basically none since it's a fan fic and you are kinda expected to have seen the anime.it is fan fic of. last updated almost a month ago so update stability is bad Now the problem is that the author suggests*in the comments* there would be romance and love interest tbh I even gave this novel a try because I didn't see any tag for that but apparently nope MC is supposedly from a clan that could go toe to toe with demons and elves but the mc whose biggest ability should be mana capacity due to his magic core still has less mana then royals mc got an ability that lets him absorb power of one enemy he slay per day and even defeating a random weak enemy gave him 0.5 point of mana you would think with such an ability mc would have insane amount of mana reserves surpassing everyone but nah mc got 220 after five years even assuming he got only 0.5 points from that everyday for five years he would still have over 900 mana just from that yet he trains with possibly the best teacher who is not a captain and ends up with a mana reserve of 220 oh also mc got a sharingan *facepalm* and mc is uhhh overly kind this one didn't effect the rating tho he doesn't have any specific reason to be cruel so it was bearable

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