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Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv122yr
2022-08-02 13:59

I'll be clear and direct, the fanfic in general is good and interesting, but the author always completely ruins things when he tries to put drama in the story. Basically everything but the drama is really well done and an 8/10, but when the author tries to create chapters focused on drama with the MC going through problems like depression, facing the past and etc the author spoils it so completely that I want to drop the fanfic. We recently had the author forcing the drama with MC making an extremely stupid and unnecessary decision that even in chapter 166 almost made me drop the fanfic. I honestly can't recommend this fanfic to new readers because despite being a fun and interesting read it comes along with some of the worst and most frustrating chapters to read I've ever seen in my 15 years as an otaku (ignoring truly rubbish stories where the author doesn't even try)

The Wandering of an Unstuck Stepbro: Multiverse Travel

kurit_kun
4.2
325 Chs

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TrashHeap
TrashHeapLv4

This perfectly encapsulates my thoughts on the story.

2yr
5
WiLeYBiGhEaD
WiLeYBiGhEaDLv12

Stopped reading a while ago for the exact same reasons. Stopped by to see if things changed. Glad I left when I did.

1yr
1
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kurit_kun
kurit_kunAuthor

Now that I reached 100th chapter it's time for author's review and shamless 5 star is mendatory. Firstly first 10 chapters or so aren't the greatest and I get. Probably the most people dropped around these chapters, lol, but in my humble opinion the quality goes up afterwards. You are probably wondering why they dropped so early on. Well... I commited a grave sin of writing annoying system because I wanted to write some character development and after 10th chapter it gets better or at least that's what people are saying. Secondly my writing format may not be for everyone so if you're not a fan of script format then save yourself some trouble and don't start reading it. Besides these two things iI think the story tunred out quite nice and if you also think so leave positive review.

2yr

James_0903_
James_0903_Lv14

I don't even care how the story turns out the bully Maguire dance Mission won this review 💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯

2yr
Snake_Orc
Snake_OrcLv10

Haven’ read it but the billy maguire dance sold it for me.

2yr
Psan
PsanLv5

well... the grammar is ok. but this is one of those super ultra annoying systems with ridiculous punishments and way to OP rewards. chapter 5 and 4 quests done he gets spiderman powers and all seen eyes of god". i doubt this gets to 20 chapters

2yr
C0DA
C0DALv2

If Harem has a million Haters, I am one of them . If Harem has ten Haters, I am one of them. If Harem have only one Hater, then that Hater is me. If Harem has no Haters, that means that I am no longer alive. If the entire world accepts Harems, I am against the world. Till my Last Breath, I'll hate Harems

2yr
Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

Too much comedy and it's all so UNBERABLY CRINGY. MC is, of course, have personality of beaten dog, submisive, stupid. And romance is just... uuuh. How did you make original looks more mature and pleasant? It's to love-ru for God sake! Either way, that's just horrible.

2yr
Huntsman
HuntsmanLv2

I haven't seen a decently written and readable To Love Tu fic since forever, so 5 stars. Depends on how the story turns out, I may change it, but good job bro.

2yr
lBlaz
lBlazLv4

A troll fic, if you can bare with sassy system, unreasonable logic then you can go on read this fic.. ... ..... ... .. ............ ........

2yr
Gabichu_Yeah
Gabichu_YeahLv3

Slave of system ...............................................................................................................................................................................................................

2yr
BASTILLE
BASTILLELv13

One of the most unfunny ff’s out there. Author does a great job with creating scenarios and personalities but a very poor one with comedy. Mc constantly gets humiliated by the system’s punishments, and it is always so awkward to read. Wish the author would have focused more on romance/slice of life in which he has more talent.

2yr
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