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Life_sa_Beach
Life_sa_BeachLv41yr
2022-12-14 03:00

32 chapters in and I gotta say it's fine but not everyone would enjoy it. The kids ruined it. 100% ,them having children lowered the quality. And character development could have been better, the first 5 chapters of the fic was good after that it was just too rushed. And now after 30 chapters I just feel bored there isn't enough information to enjoy. The novel is like a slice of life so in my humble opinion a time skip was unnecessary and the fic went down hill from there on. I expected something like Silverfire but it didn't quite live up to the expectation.

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Elliot_Jackson
Elliot_JacksonAuthor

Thanks for the review! I shall consider it the next time I do a story.

Life_sa_Beach
Life_sa_BeachLv4

I'm not saying it's bad, it just didn't live up to my expectations. So I was a little disappointed that's all just like how hyped movies disappoint us not cuz they are bad but cuz they didn't live upto expectation

Elliot_Jackson:Thanks for the review! I shall consider it the next time I do a story.
Elliot_Jackson
Elliot_JacksonAuthor

I know, sorry about that, and good luck finding other books to read 👍

Life_sa_Beach:I'm not saying it's bad, it just didn't live up to my expectations. So I was a little disappointed that's all just like how hyped movies disappoint us not cuz they are bad but cuz they didn't live upto expectation
Elliot_Jackson
Elliot_JacksonAuthor

I wasn't dismissing what you said when I said that.

Life_sa_Beach:I'm not saying it's bad, it just didn't live up to my expectations. So I was a little disappointed that's all just like how hyped movies disappoint us not cuz they are bad but cuz they didn't live upto expectation
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