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2022-11-24 20:49

the only thing that annoys me is the title, unless something changes, which at this rate will take 70 more chaps before they get married, pls change the title

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I timeskiped

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I hate doing this kind of half-a*sed review but the first two chapters p*ssed me off and I didn't feel like keep going. I'll try to do a basic review based on what I read. 1-Writing Quality: The writing is decent, it's not the best but it's not the worst and in WN we've all seen the badly written translations so we know what bad looks like. [3 Stars Here] 2-Story Development: What is this? We go with the flow and what the author feels like writing. Space pod crashing in a city? Done. Going Great Ape in the City? Done. Consequences? Is that fruit? [2 Stars Here] 3-Character Design: There's no dept, consistency or common sense to any character in the first two chapters. MC gets adopted like a lost puppy. No one noticed the crash. A bleeding woman acts like nothing happened. *Sigh* 4-Update Stability: I don't know, I added this today and am removing it on the same day. [3 Stars Here] 5-World Background: There is no World Background, there is no scene description, there is no "painting a picture", there is no setting a scene. You just read. [1 Star Here] OVERALL: 2.2 Just so people don't think this is bull on my biased opinion read the first two chapters, it might be the story for you. This is just not it for me, I can't see my brain cells die like this. Here's a recap of what I commented on the author's post: "The level of bull in this story is amazing. For future readers this is just chapter 1, I don't know if it improves but right now this is the illogical stuff that happened in this reincarnated cross over. In case this gets deleted I'll post it again later. Shield notices incoming objects all the time, captain Marvel situation ring any bells? And if that's not enough a space pod crashes in earth and no one comments, makes a fuss and only the couple notice that. And that's not even the cherry on top. NO! The cherry is having a kid living in the city turn into a giant as* Ape and not one fuss from SHIELD, HYDRA, The Hand or the Military! And as a Bonus Magic or the mystic arts is so common that Aunt May managed to get him to learn "Magic"."

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