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HazeUniverse_1
HazeUniverse_1Lv22yr
2022-02-04 02:44

story is great but you should use commas and punctuation marks brackets etc and make it more Readable overall it is nice I will support you with power stones so keep it up bro

The rise of the pervert primordial

Barion_Trident
4.6
654 Chs

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Barion_Trident
Barion_TridentAuthor

Thanks for the support i will work to improve on my grammar.

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Joethedeath
JoethedeathLv15

you should post a self review so that people have an easier space to ask questions lol ( dunno if you have a discord for that ) was wondering whats going on with this novel, i took a month or so break to let chapters stack up and somehow your other novel actually almost caught up in chaptera to this one? are you slowly dropping? ( really hope not ) or is something goin on? just curious as i loved this novel and it was my first if yours to read

Barion_Trident:Thanks for the support i will work to improve on my grammar.
1yr
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Barion_Trident
Barion_TridentAuthor

Don't remember if I already answered another comment of yours, so I'll say it in this one, not dropping or anything I just had a messed up schedule in the last month, everything will return to normal, in fact I might be posting more then once a day in pervert primordial depending on the situation XD

Joethedeath:you should post a self review so that people have an easier space to ask questions lol ( dunno if you have a discord for that ) was wondering whats going on with this novel, i took a month or so break to let chapters stack up and somehow your other novel actually almost caught up in chaptera to this one? are you slowly dropping? ( really hope not ) or is something goin on? just curious as i loved this novel and it was my first if yours to read
1yr
Joethedeath
JoethedeathLv15

super glad to hear this, you should also post a self review or set up a discord so that your readers have an easier place to ask you any questions, thank you for all your hard work

Barion_Trident:Don't remember if I already answered another comment of yours, so I'll say it in this one, not dropping or anything I just had a messed up schedule in the last month, everything will return to normal, in fact I might be posting more then once a day in pervert primordial depending on the situation XD
1yr
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~It is good, just one simple problem author, we need pic of characters for visualisation of story and stuff 'cough' segs 'cough' ..........,~😏

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