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2023-11-23 17:28

I like character development and plot holes that are not too easy to predict. The author did a good job in this light. But he/she failed the consistence of releasing new chapters. Now 5 chapters in 3 months(privileged chapters) and no further interaction with readers. I question the possibility of this novel to be "completed". Even said that, I still want to support a potential writer and look forward to the continous story. Pls don't leave us half the way.

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