I really love your story so far. When i stumbled upon this fic I was curious so I started reading . Your story is interesting in the way yiuve st it up with the power youve given him. What really needs to be fleshed out is his over all motivation. Does he want a family? Does he have a specific goal besides making a harem and enslaving the whole human race in the pokemon world? Is he going to have a harem or find one person? These are things that need to be adressed or can be adressed later to help grow your writing or just your characters in this fic. I love your story and will continue to enthusiastically read it but these are the things I would love to see to get a feel for your character And make them mor human and less like human drones he controls. THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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