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EmptyLogic
EmptyLogicLv132yr
2022-03-27 04:35

The writing/story needs more Explanations and context, the characters are okay, but the story pace is pretty slow, and the story itself is very generic... Please change your writing, and add more Explanations and Contexts, idc if english isn't your first or native language, people can improve, so you can do it too, author :)

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Author, if you're reading this... Please, improve your writing Add more Explanations and reread your works, so that there can never be a typo, or missing contexts.

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