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Interesting direction you're going for, author... keep up the great writing, every story should have its ups and down in terms of plot and story.
Good so far, even though it's short... Write what you feel like is right author.
Thanks for the chapter, great work as always.
No need for it actually. You can just stay as is and continue making the story better, don't write different stories at the same time, it might jumble you up.
This is my honest critique. The updates are fine, the author updates almost daily. The author doesn't have perfect grammer in his writing but it's still understandable and quite decent I'll say. I also like this new unique idea for the the nasuverse, it brings in fresh air. Overall, the author is still working on his writing and plot development, personally I wouldn't judge it just yet, but the author asked for a review so I did it anyways hahahaha... anyways, I think this was a unique idea BUT the world building is not there yet, the writing quality is still improving, the story development is currently ok but I hope the author can make it better, its heading towards the right direction thats for sure. Thank you author for this wonderful work, I hope you don't overwork yourself and always remember, don't treat it like a job.
Interesting continuation author, I'm delighted that you're doing well hahaha... keep up the good work 👏 🙌 👍
Ye I understand now. but still, as I was saying in my previous comments, this could be done better in alternative ways. by hypnotizing him and making him rampage or something along those lines. But you do you I guess... this is your writing after all... I'm just giving feedback, that what the comments are for, after all.
You also did this with his sister, I mean I understand that you want the MC to be more active and have more plot, but it can approached in another way better than this. I'm sorry if I'm complaining too much. it's just left a bad taste on me. keep on going on what you're doing author.
So yeah, may I ask author? why would you do that? do you hqve that kind of fetish or something? I'm asking genuinely here, this isn't even supposed to be that deep and all just for fun, but THAT? please give me answers...