hmm... The plot is interesting. I wonder when will the romance start tho. There are a few mistakes here and there but still bearable. Keep going and I wish you lots of love. Good luck, Author Nigs121.

The story and premise is good and it has potential as settings like these have not been done yet. Romance is not my cup of tea as most of the time the story is shown form one perspective that this novel is not doing and in my books is pretty good. We need to have both side of coins and their own lives and how they intersect with each other. Would also love if the ML changes with time due to his experience living FL. The only gripe I have with this novel is the grammar and typos. A lot of work is needed in this department, I mean a lot. There are a lot of formatting issues in the novel as well. I would suggest the author to read their work and fix the formatting issues, google docs may help a lot in this problem, you can even use grammarly addon in google docs to fix your grammar mistakes.

I've read the first chapter and I think this novel has the potential. I mean it's good but still has some grammar mistakes. Well, I won't say anymore, all the best for the author.

Has good potential. Grammar needs work, and chapters are very short but can be overcome with quantity. I also like the layout making it easier to read instead of huge blocks of text which can be hard for a web novel. I gave this 5*'s but in all honesty, I don't know what it deserves as I don't read this genre often or ever.

The author is new but talented, the story is new but interesting. there are indeed grammatical mistakes in it that can't be denied for which I would give 3/5 in writing quality. Character design and world background are excellent while the update rate is consistent until now. I would say the story is not a drag.

The story premise is good.✅ The pacing is nice.✅ The characters are great.✅ Grammar is...not really good I would say. It would be better if you use Grammarly and also read other authors' books to understand how they write and explain things. The writing style is not appealing, try to be creative in how to write, rather than just plainly writing each and everything in simple words.(This too can be improved as long as you 'continue writing' and READING other novels as an AUTHOR and NOT AS A READER). The story is beautiful though, if you can correct all the grammers, I believe the story will surely bloom with time.

I really like your novel, it's heart warming and the way you describe their feelings is just.. perfect. I can't wait for more. Do your best author

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This novel seemed really good, well one had to say about story development is good too, this is the first time I am reading this type of genre, but I guess I will start reading this type of novels too, thanks for the chapter and novel again.

A good read. The story itself has potential to be something trully amazing, the plot seems promising through out the chapters and the character's are life like which is good at the reader's interpretation. Overall i liked the story.