The problem with this story is how much it repeats itself. You have the story told from the protagonists perspective for 2 chapters then the next 2 chapters are the exact same story told again but with other characters reaction added. This gets tedious pretty fast and results in a glacial plot pace.
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LIKEFrom what I’ve seen in the reviews, I think that it should probably be in no-one’s perspective and that it should be told outside of a single person’s perspective. You could say the other people’s perspective without having all of those extra chapters. Honestly, it could do without the extra chapters of nonsense and perspectives. And I’ve also heard that there are some things that are down right stupid, like praising someone for using a shield to block. LIKE- THAT’S WHAT A SHIELD IS USED FOR?! WHY WOULDNT THE SHIELD BE USED WITHOUT IT’S PURPOSE?! TO BE AESTHETICALLY? NO.