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Kotik_KotikLv52yr
2022-09-24 18:21

unsatisfying. I've now read 250 chapters and while i really want to like this i just don't. the last 150 chapters left me in a perpetual state of annoyance. we have a very cool set up, the first 100 chapters are well written some pacing issues but nothing deal breaking. The mc keeps getting into impossible situation which means he gets absolutely trashed, he does manage to make it out alive but you never really get this satisfying pay off, additional there's no real rest between one catastrophic desaster and the next. As a consequence it often feels like the mc is power less and even in situations where we could get some satisfying comeuppance like with the scamming information merchant we just move on. another peeve i have is that at some point MCs brain goes afk and we have to deal with the consequences for the next 100 chapters. all in all very unsatisfying but sadly not bad enough for me to put away immediately causing me to waste too much time... p.s if you want to read a story with these flaws but on crack give stygian diviner a go you'll hate it

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Shade_ArjuunAuthor

Nice. thank you for the elaborate review. I've taken these concerns into account and I appreciate the delivery. First off, I'll say that this story is written according to how long I estimate it to be, which is... pretty long. the Mc seems to not be growing because the story is broad and I'm going for a more believable growth for someone who spent 1000 years doing simple tasks. even with the guidance field, he can't suddenly become an overpowered and smart character because readers expect that. his growth is spawning from what he is learning in every arc of the story. as for the unsatisfying bit, I can't change how you feel but I do understand, though at this point in the story, Skullius has achieved what I'd say are 2 wins (you probably haven't read them yet). All in all, like I said in the auxiliary chapter, be patient with Skullius. this is his story, best not compare him to a different mc. as for the recurring theme of trouble after trouble. Well, thats how this story is designed. the atrocious luck aspect. someone with that bad of luck is prone to getting into trouble many times but the payoffs will get better and better. thank you very much for the review🙂

Kotik_KotikLv5

his growth speed isn't the problem neither is there being a problem after problem type set up nor are powerfull enemies or the short time span of it all. all of these things, or even a few, are fine on their own but having all of them is just way too much.

Shade_Arjuun:Nice. thank you for the elaborate review. I've taken these concerns into account and I appreciate the delivery. First off, I'll say that this story is written according to how long I estimate it to be, which is... pretty long. the Mc seems to not be growing because the story is broad and I'm going for a more believable growth for someone who spent 1000 years doing simple tasks. even with the guidance field, he can't suddenly become an overpowered and smart character because readers expect that. his growth is spawning from what he is learning in every arc of the story. as for the unsatisfying bit, I can't change how you feel but I do understand, though at this point in the story, Skullius has achieved what I'd say are 2 wins (you probably haven't read them yet). All in all, like I said in the auxiliary chapter, be patient with Skullius. this is his story, best not compare him to a different mc. as for the recurring theme of trouble after trouble. Well, thats how this story is designed. the atrocious luck aspect. someone with that bad of luck is prone to getting into trouble many times but the payoffs will get better and better. thank you very much for the review🙂
Shade_ArjuunAuthor

I see. Some adjustments are in order then. but I intended for Skullius to get an amp in this new volume so the story will differ from the way it already was. perhaps it will be to your liking tgen

Kotik_Kotik:his growth speed isn't the problem neither is there being a problem after problem type set up nor are powerfull enemies or the short time span of it all. all of these things, or even a few, are fine on their own but having all of them is just way too much.
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Although I would say that for the first few hundred chapters this was not a big issue and I was able to easily follow along, I feel that ever since the recent chapters (after Skullius went through a ’perspective’ changing moment hahaha), I have begun having a lot more difficulty following exactly how strong Skullius and other characters are. While I know that a lot of WN series like to use UI systems that provide numerical values to stats and clearly illustrate abilities, it sort of becomes a big problem as characters actuslly start becoming powerful. More recently, I feel like both the attribute statistics as well as the number of abilities themselves have sort of skyrocketed and become pretty hard to follow. I almost feel as if I need to start screenshotting or taking down notes of the most up to date character stats because I literally cannot recall these numbers or find them again to be able to actually compare how one characters fares to another. 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