Overall the story is good, the MC is interesting because of his background, but there are a lot of characters that are important besides a few. There is always updates happening so you don't have to wait long and the grammar is good, the world background is important because of the mc and him trying to find out what happened. so overall the story is good, but it can get a bit boring sometimes, but it usually so the plot can progress. There isn't a lot of fighting, so it's hard to know how powerful someone is exactly. So like I said the story is good. GOOD JOB AUTHOR!!!!!
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thanks for the review[img=recommend]... and I'm trying to work on creating more conflicts between Xi Shen and other characters, so it would lead to more action. Hopefully, that would make up for the boring parts
hey, quick question Mack, can you tell me the parts, or rather the situations you find boring? I want to know so that in future chapters I know what not to do or lessen it. I think my writing can improve further with your help, so I'll appreciate it very much if you reply!
Gavyn_Mack:Im not proficient at writing reviews, if you couldn't tell, sorry.
For me, the parts that would get boring, are the parts that go on for to long or the parts that get a bit repetitive, so for example, the mc wants to get improve, so let's say, if everytime he improves there is someone who goes against him it will get repetitive. How about this, if I am getting bored On a part of the story, I will tell you. because at the moment, the situation that is happening now, is not boring. does this help?
Tsetth:hey, quick question Mack, can you tell me the parts, or rather the situations you find boring? I want to know so that in future chapters I know what not to do or lessen it. I think my writing can improve further with your help, so I'll appreciate it very much if you reply!
hmhm, it'll definitely help to get feedback back from one of my readers, so I know how to make my book more enjoyable[img=recommend][img=recommend]...Though remember I will take it with a grain of salt as there might be someone else out there who finds those parts enjoyable, but your feedback will still help immensely, so thanks in advance[img=recommend]
Gavyn_Mack:For me, the parts that would get boring, are the parts that go on for to long or the parts that get a bit repetitive, so for example, the mc wants to get improve, so let's say, if everytime he improves there is someone who goes against him it will get repetitive. How about this, if I am getting bored On a part of the story, I will tell you. because at the moment, the situation that is happening now, is not boring. does this help?
