sure, I've noticed that you don't use enough pronouns(He, she), which makes reading feel weird and fake in some way. You want your story to flow and connect, which leads to another problem I noticed. you don't use commas, you use periods. when you use periods for everything, it makes your story feel like it's starting and ending over and over again. so try adding more commas.

I finally caught up to the latest chapter, all I can say is that the story is good, but the writing quality isn't. now don't get me wrong, I've seen worse out there, but the writing mistakes are noticeable and numerous. but like I said, this is a good story so, can't wait for more 👍

another day, another chapter, I can't wait for more. though I'm curious to see how everyone's relationships will grow

honestly, I can't wait to see more, i want MORE FIGHTS!!!! I'm excited

😑 what is this

The story is interesting, it's more than your typical evil izuku story. It explains how and why the events happened the way they did, and it does this exceptionally well, by providing the pov of other characters, and though you may not see a lot of izuku's pov.when it does arrive, it's even more exciting. Though sometimes it can be a bit long until you see his pov. Overall i recommend this story, the writing quality is good, and even though it's a fanfic, the way it leads to each event, feels like a different story. for people who don't like a story that involves multiple pov's, this story may not be for you, but I suggest giving it a try 👍

interesting 🤔

I honestly dislike her family, but I wonder what Bjorn's thoughts are, after all he is the MC.

YES, I can't wait for more, especially from izuku's pov

reading this, actually made me laugh

honestly, I found this story yesterday and I started reading it today. I finally got to the latest chapter 😄 can't wait for the next few chapters, I'm super excited

I wanna see how the guilt thing goes 🤔 will it get worse or better..... anyways, thank you for the chapter author 👍

I can't wait to see how his powers will improve and develop. also, I'm excited to see how the talk with herta goes

the story is doing really good right now, I can't wait to see what comes next

thank you for the chapter Author, the ChildOfAidon

thanks for the chapter, I hope everything goes smoothly for them, even if for a little bit

thanks for the chapter, I hope everything goes smoothly for them, even if for a little bit

I finally made it to the end, well until more chapters come out, anyways I'm really enjoying the story so keep up the fantastic work author 👍

thank you for the chapter, I can't wait for more

than you author for the chapter