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LightningCatThiefLv122yr
2022-05-02 11:18

The premise of this story is halfway decent, the author had some interesting ideas and tried to pull an interesting spin on an old genre. The major problem with this novel is that the author utterly fails to express emotions in a convincing way. The MC feels wooden and constructed because he has either too much emotions or none at all. Side-Characters are a lot better, but not really relevant due to the premise of this story. World building is okay-is, not good, but vague enough to be believable. Differences in planets are almost nonexistent, but again, this isn't a slice of life or exploration type of story. Pasing is another problem, we either get way to much information about things we don't need to care about at all, or not enough to really imagine what is going on.

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GrandpaPengLv4

The chapters are split up. Chapter 40(1) on webnovel is actually chapter 19 MTL/RAW. The site smuggled in a new business opportunity - splitting the chapters. In this case, they gave us less than 19 full chapters. Used to be 60.. 40.. What a magic! Of deception. The first chapters.. are unpolished by the author in my opinion. But if it improves later on then it's fine. There's some bland, stiff dialogue, unnatural behaviour, forced plot. The high rating's reason? Author's name does the job, for example. Besides, there's potential, just that the execution so far is average. The MC got [Agility] talent, then after using it he calls himself talented while being serious. Ha ha ha.. :D It's one of these novels where the one that takes MC role is decided by system (or well, apparently it's his Super ability). The author doesn't bother to write about the process of e.g. overcoming a language barrier. Just use system and... done, problem solved. For convenience... Grown men shown so far have somewhat flawed, unsuitable mentality for the roles they play (apparently they are experienced hunters but I wonder how they grew up and how they survived till now in such a dangerous world). The MC himself is alright, a bit dumb, a sheltered flower, no survival skills, so whatever logic or reasoning he comes up with is fine:) Hopefully he'll grow up as his adventures continue, or else be prepared for masterminds to have less IQ than he does. The author chose to write a novel with system and copied a popular idea. What was his motivation for this, one could wonder. In the same batch of trials, the author of "Protect our Patriarch(Chief)" actually roasted this kind of system novels. My comment is based only on the 19 (split into 40) chapters translated right now, because I have not touched MTL. If I read more chapters in future I'll either re-write my comment or add a fresh one with proper rating. 19 is not much after all and the subsequent might have a higher quality, I don't know. There are novels like World's Best Martial Artist, Museum of Deadly Beasts, A Sorcerer's Journey, Black Iron's Glory and many more that had even more boring, or cliche, or flawed initial chapters yet turned out to be much much better as I continued to read. It might also be the case with Astral Apostle.

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