Alrighty. So a bit of a disclaimer before I get into the meat and potatoes of my review here. First of all, I am NO expert in the field of literature. Most of the time, I go by my gut, so my takes aren't exactly as on point as others. That said, maybe that's a good thing because of the forthrightness of it all. Furthermore, this is my first review, so bear with me if my interpretations of some portions are off-base. Writing quality I put at a 3/5. I think the reasoning is fairly straightforward here, there are quite a few grammatical and punctuation errors. It's nothing to feel bad about, or even get upset over, as none of them really broke the immersion too much. I noticed as the chapters wore on, that they gradually started to disappear, which made me believe it was actually an intentional technique of indicating Reverie's mental state. Turns out, I may have been wrong on that interpretation, but hey, I can still dream right? Stability of updates? I only just read it, so wouldn't know, so I'll give it a 5 because why not. The story was intriguing, to say the least. I'm unsure if you've ever read this manhua before, but some parts of your novel remind me of Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint. This novel has a lot of the same themes I really enjoyed from it. So good on you for making something that brought back good memories! Character design is good but somewhat lacking, why do I say that. Well, although I'm not experienced in the craft of character making, one thing I noticed throughout the available chapters is the, how should I put this... presence from Reverie. Maybe that's intentional, so I won't cramp the style (maybe I'm simply off-put by the style, which is no skin off your back). Though I thought her brazenness was rather hilarious. "Won't take me to your ruler? Imma smash some stuff!" World background is for the same reasons for the most part. I felt it was somewhat awkward trying to get a feel for what happened after the train crash. Everything was on fire, yeah... but was there anything else besides that? Or was that all Reverie could see? That scene could do with some more elaboration. And that's about it. 4.2/5 overall. There's a lot of potential to it. As a writer, I could never have come up with some of the themes it has, I might consider reading further if there's more, just for reference purposes, of course... totally not because I enjoyed a good deal of it.
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thank you! I got an Editor so that might be why my grammar got better haha 😅😳 and yes as a Beginner author i still got a lot to learn so your feedback is highly appreciated 🙏 I hope you will continue reading as I Update chapters daily and will enjoy the story. Also yes I absolutely love ORV! ♡ T^T
