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Eldritch_Umbra
Eldritch_UmbraLv13yr
2021-11-14 13:21

This book is enjoyable. The plot is relatively unique, and the world building in this story is nearly professional. And at the time of this review, the author is new to the world of writing, making this very impressive. However, the story isn't without it's downsides. The writing quality, while it does improve as it goes along, is not great. Numbers are still used in the place of words, character emotions that are obvious through the usage of context clues are overly explained or blatantly stated when it's not needed. The story is developing slowly, but it is developing, which means that the progress made in a chapter is noticeable, Overall, this is a decent story with excellent world building that continues to improve and develop the more you read it. 4.0/5

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