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Ghostly_Prince
Ghostly_PrinceLv112yr
2022-01-07 02:54

Okay, this Is a story that really, really suprised me and I have to say it's one of the few gems in my books. . Maybe it's because it's free from meaningless faceslaps, and moronic scenes of senseless patriotism.... even if it's there, maybe it's just a different favorite that why I'm suprised. And thank God..in including different races and nationalities, instead of saying you hate foreigners like other Chinese novels . please update faster!

Re: Life - Business & Technology

Viincentt
4.4
164 Chs

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Viincentt
ViincenttAuthor

Thanks for the kind words! Cheers

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Viincentt
ViincenttAuthor

Author here. Thank you guys for checking out and reading my first attempt at writing a novel. I would highly appreciate any feedback in the reviews and you are welcome to message me on webnovel about the novel. Thank you again!!

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AkiraLight
AkiraLightLv15

At the time of this review there's only 20 chapters, it won't be a detailed review but i will update later on in the novel. The writing quality is a 5/5 for me, there are grammatical mistakes and mistakes with the calculations but it's not to frequent within the novel, it noticable but won't ruin the experience. One example of these calculations errors is with the mc's mother. In one chapter his mother was said to make 50k a month while working as a secretary. I think you meant 50k a year as a month would be an over price. The pace of the novel dosen't feel to rushed and is a steady pace. The detail to character development and world background is doing great, the interaction with other characters comes of as natural and not awkward or unrealistic. overall I highly recommend reading this novel if you're into mc's building up their financial empire while only utilizing their future knowledge.

3yr
rob_von_carstein
rob_von_carsteinLv1

Writing quality is excellent. Wish i could for free though as i cannot read the rest. I like where this story is heading. The characters are memorable. World seems to be full of cool places and things, and the tech in use is fascinating. This guys novel has a website which you all should check out, full of art and graphics. you can tell they have put a lot of effort into it. Overall its a 10/10.

2yr
BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

It has potential but ruined early 1 mc shifts to being 13 to quickly 2 mc focusing on bitcoin instead of other avenues of wealth 3 not clear on how much earned and how much spent ruins immersion 4 ex husband hired an expert yet a 13 year old defeated him easily without real expertise 5 not clear where set 6 illogical speed for earnings 7 why only focus on digital and not land etc 8 mc is multimillionaire yet you expect readers to believe he isn't getting more attention at school 9 mother follows everything he says because he says it 10 to many time skips

3yr
WealthyRaccoon
WealthyRaccoonLv14

A solid idea unfortunately brought down by the the portrayal of the world and characters within it. It's fine to have a hyper competent MC but others must react accordingly; after the first game released there should have been interviews, TV appearances, the school would have literally thrown his face everywhere they could to say look how successful our students are. Whether it's his mother, friends, other students, the school, the media, or the world as a whole; literally everyone has failed to show an even slightly proportional reaction to any of his achievements. This story is by no means bad in terms of grammar, plot or structure, it simply fails to create a believable world and comes of as lifeless as a result.

3yr
Kurdi123
Kurdi123Lv11

no plot logic. why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why😑 why why why why why why why why why😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑 why why why why why why why why why 😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑

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galactica
galacticaLv2

He (Brian_Gallacher) summarized my criticism very well so I'll just copy and paste it. It has potential but ruined early 1 mc shifts to being 13 to quickly 2 mc focusing on bitcoin instead of other avenues of wealth 3 not clear on how much earned and how much spent ruins immersion 4 ex husband hired an expert yet a 13 year old defeated him easily without real expertise 5 not clear where set 6 illogical speed for earnings 7 why only focus on digital and not land etc 8 mc is multimillionaire yet you expect readers to believe he isn't getting more attention at school 9 mother follows everything he says because he says it 10 to many time skips

2yr
Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

It's not my cup of coffee. I like to read stories that have the premise with this story (the synopsis: time travel; MC male; Build country, kingdom, company...) ————————————————————— The writing quality is good ... good author work. The problem is MC and consequently the development of the story. In the story, the year is 2011 and MC is 13 years old. So, unexpectedly MC can create companies, games, programs ... BUT! It seems illogical to me that no one question MC, How can a child without education do technological, economic, legal jobs? In addition, MC has no legal problems to work and do business ... and that is illogical; his age (13 years) prevents him from doing all this, because the countries They make laws to prevent child labor ... according to the UN treaty, the member countries are legally obliged to protect children. Uffffff, well...

3yr
OrIgIn
OrIgInLv14

Reveal spoiler

2yr
KoAery
KoAeryLv11

40 Chapters as of making this review. Reading the novel feels like a fever dream the world is weird since things from 2020 are appearing in 2012 the main character feels like hes just there to do a single thing and only that and its to improve technology. The snowball move was quite nice but kind of destroyed alot of plot. Also internet seems to fade in and out of existence its like its there for fillers and the next couple of chapters are just tech talk. nevertheless its an ok novel 8.5/10

2yr
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