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Death_Penalty
Death_PenaltyLv132yr
2022-06-29 07:49

Honestly really liked it first 30 chapters but the moment it goes away from being just the Mc to the guild is when it becomes sloppy. The difference between the growth rate in power when he was alone and when he is with them is stupid. Another thing author was very focused on levels and details of the Mc but what happened after that nothing no show cased in level growth, 10*Exp potions never mentioned or used, which could easily give him a lead, another problem is he is a regress or but his knowledge doesn't seem oh so great.And lastly I feel that it was too rushed to introduce side characters as not alot of time was given to the Mc for us to develop a connection with so now if the Mc dies I wouldn't even care and could continue reading the story

Virtual World : Pocket Sanctuary

ChaosWriter
4.7
128 Chs

Liked it!

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ChaosWriter
ChaosWriterAuthor

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. It will help me make better stories in the future. I hope to see you again. Bye!

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darkgoddess1
darkgoddess1Lv12

did you drop the novel authorsan?

ChaosWriter:Thanks for pointing out the mistakes. It will help me make better stories in the future. I hope to see you again. Bye!
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